- This isn't as bad as when I was 12 yr old writer but 15-16 yr old me wasn't perfect yet. There are some things that I am unhappy with but it won't be rewritten as a separate book. I'm still currently editing chapter so its expected that unedited c...
I assure you I am working on this stories chapters. I just decided that it doesn't really flow of the beginning. It seemed a bit fast and while I'm not rewriting it entirely, I am re-uploading chapters with a better flow. The story is still the same just more fluff to match. I have already re-uploaded the first chapter, so if you want to go see what's changed I encourage. There's a much more fun dynamic I added in.
I also wanted to change Hitomi's design. Before she was quite literally a gender-bend of her father rather than a child of two people. She shouldn't look exactly like her father, so I decided to change her look a bit. Now I have put in elements of two people rather than just Deidara.
I thought about waiting to release her new character design but might as well show how she looks. Tell me what you think:
P.S. if you are wondering what the color change is, she is now considered a strawberry blonde.
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