I Critique

Critique #2

Note: I may sandwich, but I won't sugarcoat. I also tried, critiquing in full Filipino. I failed.

Title: Kimberly

By: Dayanarysong

Nang binasa ko ang titulo, akala ko talaga babae si Kimberly lol.

Anyways, using a name as a title for a book is not an unusual thing. A ton of writers use it, and giventhe right name, a book could look appealing to the readers, when they read.

As for your title, it did not work personally for me because I have this thing for patterns. Once I get the gist of something, I no longer take a liking to it. But that's just me and my prejudice self.

So why am I saying this? That's because I want you to know that there isn't a book that works for all audiences. There are really people that would ignore your book no matter how good it is. And I may not like this title, but I can name a number of people who will surely open your book once they see this. Everything is just a matter of readers preference.

So objectively speaking, this title is a good title.

(Excuse my love to blabber)

Blurb

Blurb does look catchy. It's the common kind of blurb that most novelist use, but it's a blurb that works pretty well when it comes to getting readers attention. Siguro kaunting hilot lang para mas maging kaaya-aya pa sya.

POV

Ang ginagamit mong POV ay Third Person Point of View, Omniscient. Ibig sabihin, hindi kasali ang narrator sa istorya. This kind of POV is also like looking at the characters through a birds eye view. Ibig sabihin ang narrator ay all knowing at all seeing.

Ngunit kahit all knowing at all seeing and third person, wala itong kakayahan na marinig ang internal monologue ng isang karakter, kagaya nang nangyayari sa k'wento mo.

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