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A Billion Dollar Mess by Pauly_Queen123 - reviewed by Raitzyel

Username: Pauly_Queen123
Title: A Billion Dollar Mess
Genre: Teen Fiction
Amount of Reviewed Chapters: 10
Reviewer: raitzyel

1. Title

The moment I saw your title, I thought it was great! It gave me an idea of what would be involved and I knew right away what to expect. It also fits with your chosen genre nicely, so job well done.

In terms of its relevance to the story though, it's good, but it is somewhat broad. I understand that it's referring to the situation the character gets herself into and all of that, but I still think you could've chosen a much more specific title for it. Again, that's just me, and it's still completely fine with the way that it is at the moment.

2. Cover

I think the picture in your cover is nice, I quite like it. However, the fonts don't entirely sit well with me. Your name appears to be bigger than the title itself and that's something I'm personally not fond of. The title should always stand out in the cover.

I recommend choosing another font that's bold and eye-catching. It can definitely help attract readers! Also, increase the font size and make sure it's bigger than your name. If you're not sure on what font to use, I suggest taking a look at the popular books in your genre and see what type of fonts the readers click on the most.

The mobile apps that I usually use for making covers are Canva (great fonts, templates, and filters), PicsArt (special effects and filters) and Phonto (fonts). The best part is, they're free! Believe me when I say that they can help a lot when it comes to improving your cover. Also, if you think you're just not cut out for editing/making the cover, no worries! You can always reach out to cover shops and request for one.

3. Description

The description is good, it has substance and that's what I always look for when it comes to reading them. It introduced the character, her problems, and her response to those particular problems. Nicely done! I also like how you ended it with a question, too. It adds a mysterious air to it which leaves the reader wanting more. However, I do think there's no need for that one sentence at the start. You could begin with those paragraphs and it would still be as good.

There were also a few grammatical/punctuation errors that I found, but you can easily fix those using Grammarly. A reviewer introduced this to me and man, I can't stress enough how useful this app is for correcting punctuation, grammar and other problems when it comes to editing. What's more, it's free.

If you're on the computer, you can directly type the description (and your chapters) into Grammarly, or you could also install the plugin into your browser and use it while you're writing in the Wattpad website. It automatically notifies you about mistakes and possible changes which makes it so convenient. I'm pretty sure it's also available in mobile, but I personally haven't seen what that's like, so I can't really comment much.

I'd also like to point out that in the description, you refer to Los Angeles as a country, rather than a city. Make sure you edit that part to avoid any confusion with the readers.

4. Plot

The plot is very amusing, I'll tell you that. It's something that I have never read before, so props to you. I love the idea that she gets mistaken as this other woman who's like filthy rich compared to who she really is. And now, she has to do whatever it takes to make sure her decisions don't backfire. It's a nice concept!