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The Wrong Kiss by euphoric_poly - reviewed by Ctrain8

Username: euphoric_poly

Title: The Wrong Kiss
Genre: Romance, teen fiction

Amount of Reviewed Chapters: 8 (current max.)Reviewer: Ctrain8

1. Title
So for title and cover I don't scrutinize so much, but I'll try my hardest for these two as this is my first time reviewing a title and cover. For the title, I think you did well there. It's unique, and leaves a question in the mind of the passerby. What could a 'wrong kiss' be? What makes a kiss wrong? It lets the potential reader get pulled in by that question in their mind, so good job there.

2. Cover
For the cover, I think it's great! Your cover designer definitely did a good job (Ophissiopea) and her profile should definitely be checked out. The cover, with its bright hues and sweltering oranges, gives of summer vibes which can easily translate into the thrill of young love and what it means to be at such an age. The same goes with the font, and the drawings of the characters are well done and should be appreciated. Since I don't know how to dramatically criticize a good cover I'll leave it at that. 

3. Description 
This is my first actual criticism. For your description, you want to reel readers in. Your description only restates the plot and adds a little bit of character thoughts in there. It's a little bit of a mess of a description, and definitely spoils (and spoiled for me) some of the story. I think to truly bring readers in using your description, you can hook them the same way you hooked them with the title, and that is with a little bit of questioning curiosity and wonderment. Like your title, if your description was more subtle and left a little question in your reader's mind it would prove to be a lot more effective.

4. Plot
There's a lot of clever aspects to this plot is the best thing I'll say. My favorite aspect is the part about how Jaelyn has to go to Archer to be invited to Justin's party. It's hilarious.

A small concern I have is in the very beginning, when she wears the wrong socks paired together. I don't know about you, but from the looks of it generation Z and the one before it kinnnndaaa wear and do whatever they want when it comes to a fashion sense, even if it's totally unconventional. Maybe this is just me, but everyone at my high school does whatever. It was even a trend for a while to wear slippers and pajamas to school. That being said, nobody in a high school would laugh at the fact that she's wearing mismatching socks (even if those socks share some of the same colors!).

5. Writing
My biggest problem is dialogue. The dialogue between Archer and Jaelyn, specifically. I know that you're going for that awkward, Archer controlled scenario with Jaelyn defending every quip he throws at her, but it's just weird. It's unrealistic. The dialogue between them has soooooo much sexual tension. There, I said it. Can these two get a room? So much exposure to him at all times would at the very least get her thinking, especially after Justin laughed at her and rejected her (and probably laughed at her in the past). Some of the dialogue between the two is just downright cheesy and weird because no one would even speak like that, even in their situation. (To rephrase some of what I said, I'm not a "chimney" fan).

However, it's too late to change it since you're this deep into your book and too early to change it since you're not in the editing phase yet. So, I'll just cause you to be mildly uncomfortable whenever you write that word on your keyboard. I love making big deals out of small things.