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🔱11|Shawty🔱

📌Book name:- Shawty
📌Author:- FilledWithRage
📌Reviewer: Siya
📌Chapters read:- 5
📌Genre: Poetry

Summary :- 📜
Story about Shawty aka the writer( as claimed by himself)who chose to be a gangster and later realizes what he did wrong.

Review📑

📌First impression :- When I read the first part, I was definitely intriguied by the ballad. I mean the way it synchronised with upcoming lines was fascinating

📌Cover :- Cover can be improved.

📌Description :- I really liked the way you described the entire story with such great skills. It was small yet felt content. I did not feel like you had to add some more lines, they are solely sumptuous. I liked the way you took the entire 4 chapters describing about gangster stuff and at the end twisted the plot. It was totally sweet yet a smile crept on my face.a pity smile

📌Feelings conveyed :- I can feel how convincing would it have been for Shawty, a boy who dreamt about gangster stuff to one day being offered to join a gang. I could sence how tempting it would have been but then the fact that he ignored his mom is totally wrong. The way it took turn and Shawty being arrested by the police and then while the juvenile hearing when he later realizes that the mom he ignored was the only one for him.

📌Use of poetic devices :- In English I suggest you increase the number of the type of speeches you use. It would enhance your writting skills but then even without them the poem seemed sumptuous

📌Vocabulary:- Try using new words and exploring the dictionary for you can find even better words for a particular feel which would make the ballad more interesting to read as well as less lengthy.

📌Writing skill :- You have a unique way of expressing your emotions through poetry. I loved the ballad and how its story line took turns at each passing chapter.

📌Suggestions :-

•Use new and different words. Avoid repeating the same words.
•Use figures of speech apart from rhyme.
•Punctuation errors persist which you can rectify else the book was da'bomb.

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Thank you!
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