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📌Reviewer : the_lost_stories 📌Book Name: His Angel’s Prince 📌Author : Pikulove3421 📌Genre: fanfiction, romance 📌Chapters Read : 21 chapters
📜Summary📜 The story revolves around Anika and Shivay. They have known each other from the past, but due to some incident, Shivay has lost his mental stability and turned into a kid. The family that Shivay loved the most, turns his face against him and he stands alone and is tortured by his family in this condition. Anika, who has lost his family a few years back, accepts to marry Shivay due to Shivay’s past help. And marries Shivay in unfavourable circumstances
This marriage proves to be a turning point in Shivay’s life. Anika brings love to his life. She fights with Shivay’s family for his rights and his place in the family. She helps shivay to fight his fear and insecurity of being left lonely. She stands against Pinky, Shivay’s mother to stop her torture and harassment against Shivay.
Their closeness and intimacy help recovering Shivay and his personality starts switching between a kid and a mature person. And after an accident Shivay again comes back to his old self.
📝Review:📝
📌Cover: cover is just perfect and goes with the story. But the author's name needs to be highlighted.
📌Title: title seems a little confusing to me. It's unique and suits the story but the writer can make it catchy.
📌Blurb: blurb is the very first thing that readers read in a book. The blurb is written nicely but could be a little more descriptive. I would also suggest giving the descriptions of the awards won after the blurb, instead of writing it in the beginning.
📌Grammar: there are many grammatical errors and punctuation mistakes. The chapters also consist of lots of typos. Chapters need to be edited and proofread thoroughly to remove grammatical errors and typos
📌Overall impression: the story is presented nicely. But Prologue or character sketch should be used rather than directly starting the story. It creates curiosity and helps the author to connect with the reader. You can use bold or italic fonts to present the dialogues to make it more impressive. The plot is good but not too unique. You have to think more creatively to make it different from others. Overall I enjoyed reading the story, but editing will help you to make it flawless.
Suggestions: •It would be better if you provide the English translation after the dialogues rather than writing them in comments. •You need to work on the character development, how they look, their features, their attributes can be described in detail. Since your story completely revolves around Anika and Shivay, you need to work a little hard to describe them. •Use expression words to describe the emotions of the character, it will help readers to connect to the characters and their emotions. •Proofread your story and edit it to make it error-free. •The chapter that introduces characters can be moved to the first chapter instead of the 4th or 5th.
Would you recommend others to read it: Yes! Of course. It is a different storyline from that of the show, so you must give it a try
Date:10.11 .20
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