Bee Hive Reviews

#13 THE CAVE TO KINGDOM MEROBOLIS

Reviewer: Maddy_Mel

Book title: THE CAVE TO KINGDOM MEROBOLIS

Author: Lady LightSword.

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Review notes:

TITLE AND COVER:-

The accuracy of this.. your cover. The image it portrayed.. The General point it was trying to make.. (a point, I obviously got clearly) in retrospect, or rather.. in relation to your book.. is magnifique! It was almost surreal because reading on, I already had a perfect picture. Nah, I can't say it was just almost.. it was definitely surreal to be honest. Most especially when using the song recommendations.. but. We'll come back to that in the writing aspect of this review.

Your cover art is truly beautiful. It was like the picture itself was made for you, or you'd written your book in correspondence to how your cover appeared.. and it's epic! That's definitely something I'd love to see more in books I come across. It's really hard to find a cover that relates that closely to how your book did to your cover in general, and that's inspiring to say the least. It even had the cave the title spoke about.. the two girls wandering into it just like in your first chapter. Wow. Just.. wow!

The the font.

I don't usually talk about this, but man!! To me yours was something spectacular. Like.. the way it blended in with the background!! And how it was chipped in places like it was fading and stuff. I have no words to describe it.😂 The effect was right on track! Like.. if you made that yourself, you're fucking a pro!

Or I have no idea what the fuck I'm talking about.💀

But I'd want a cover like yours for myself any day! One that attracts without necessarily being too much, too shouty or overdone.

Your Title. 'THE CAVE TO THE KINGDOM OF MEROBOLIS' Basically.. it's ORIGINAL. And that's one really important fact most books lack, and writers miss. The originality of your work. Most especially the title. Like in this case, it's obvious that it's your brain child, and that's something readers like me look for. Who would want to read an exact photocopy of someone else's work?😂 I don't have much else to say about this aspect that the book itself hasn't already done so..

THE BLURB: And by prophecy shall it be revealed...

Two made by the bond of the halfling's blood...

Shall rise by blood and flesh...

One being different from the rest, pure of heart and soul...

The other being evil as time it self...

Gives a cheerful applaud.

Now, while this! Made a lot of sense how I looked at it, there's definitely some errors that need to be corrected. And your sentence construction can definitely be placed better.

Firstly. Okay, that seemed like an indefinite abuse of the ellipsis.😂 Which most certainly, can be used in say.. maybe the first and last sentence? Indicating that's there's more to expect that's better left unsaid..

But then in every line?

Try: And by prophecy shall it be revealed.

Two made by the bond of the halfling's blood..

Shall rise by blood and flesh.

One being different from the rest, pure of heart and soul.

The other being evil as time it self...