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Existence Denied | Wera

Author: RogueWriter55

Title of Work: Existence Denied

Package: Silver Egg Package

Reviewed: Chapters 1-10

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Your cover is really creative. The color scheme, font style, and image choice go really well with the story's genre. I can really get the dystopic feel from the cover and I love that I can identify what the story will potentially be about immediately. It's very simplistic and I think it works well with the mood you're going for.

The first line of text is a little difficult to read, but I don't think that hurts your book cover necessarily since it's just credit to whoever designed it. Your name and the title as well as the subtitle "A Fantasy Novella," are legible, so that's most important. Overall, nice work!

I think your blurb is strong. However, there are some awkwardly worded sentences and this is mostly due to tense issues. I think it would read smoother if written in present tense. For example, in the second sentence of the third paragraph, this sentence reads a little awkwardly and could be fixed by changing it to present tense (changes are marked in brackets):

Jared's reassignment to the Death department, [which entail] processing death dates for the end of life, [begin] to siphon the viability out of him.

The phrase after "Death department" reads a little awkwardly like there is a word missing, so it's a little clunky to read.

In the final sentence of the blurb, it also reads a little awkwardly:

In a world where life spans [are] predetermined, what [does] it mean?

I think it would make your blurb stronger if you avoided using passive voice, eliminating all those occurrences of "were" or "was." Otherwise, the blurb does a  good job of setting up a potential conflict. I do wish there was more about the stakes because it's not immediately clear. Is Jared fighting against death? Is it fighting for it? On what part of the spectrum does his morality lie? Who is the antagonist?