Kat Reviews [CFCU]

The Gunner and the Florist | Wera

Author: CrystalCallistral

Title of Work: The Gunner and the Florist

Package: Silver Egg Package

Reviewed: Chapters 1-6

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0 out of 5

The cover isn't visually appealing to me. The 3D models look a little out of place, so I wish that all the elements looked a little more natural rather than having all of them added on. They just don't mesh well together and because of the font choice and background, it's a little difficult to read the title and your name on the cover. I also don't get a sense of what genre it is based on the different elements incorporated.

1 out of 5

I had a lot of questions after reading the blurb. Why is Lennox secretive? Are him and his brother hiding from something or someone? Are they trying to escape their past? I thought this word choice sparked more question rather than intrigue. Ensure that your descriptions are meaningful and contribute to the summary so that it builds upon the rest of the summary.

Who is the Verita Aser? And how can a florist make a difference in the war? When you introduce elements that are unknown to the reader, you have to be careful of bringing in words, terms, titles that may not make sense to the reader. If it's essential to include, a brief explanation should be provided. Is the Verita Aser a group of individuals or an individual? Are they oppressive? Using keywords like oppressive or domineering can be useful because it helps establish what relationship is there.

"In a world where everyone has a secret to keep, post-disaster Britain..." > I feel as though this should be an introductory sentence. We don't know where the story takes place, so it should be established as soon as possible for the reader. 

Overall, I don't understand what the stakes are, what the real conflict is, and what the consequences are if she doesn't succeed in uniting the two races. Think of it along this framework: [character] has to [action A] in order to [resolution]. You've introduced Lennox but the summary sort of drifts away from him into this broader view. Something that helps me put together a blurb is to map out the major plot points.