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We Are Soulmates | Mich

Author: siriusshinesregulus

Timeline: 1/11/2021 - 24/02/2022

Package: Juvenile Hermit

Chapters Reviewed: Chapter 1 - Chapter 3

Hi there, @siriusshinesregulus ! I'm sorry this review takes such a long time. I admit that last year was pretty crappy, and it got in my way a lot of times. And I'm sorry that I only managed to review three chapters so far. But hopefully this review will be worth the wait!

And I truly hope it will be helpful, especially during your editing. Please don't feel obliged to stick to this entire review, since most of them are merely suggestions. Feel free to leave an inline comment if you have any questions!

Anyway, since this is a Harry Potter fanfiction, I've given some additional opinions based on a Non-Potterhead's viewpoint while reading. The main target audience may be actual Potterheads, but I think reaching out to others will also do wonders. I hope these new pointers will help you as well, especially if you consider appealing to a wider audience.

P. S. The maximum score in this review is four. The overall score is an average of all the aspects (Scenes, Conflicts, Chapter Length, etc.) And lastly, the score of each aspect is an average of all the chapters (Chapter 1, Chapter 2, and Chapter 3).

P. S. S. Stay tuned for a surprise at the end of this review! Though this doesn't justify the delay that I've done, I hope you'll accept this token of gratitude for your utmost patience :)

🦀 SCENES 🦀

(3,467 out of 4)

CHAPTER 1

(3,5 out of 4)

There aren't many scenes in this first chapter yet, but I think it's strong enough to leave a lasting impression on the readers. The scene where Regulus begs Sirius to tell him a bedtime story is really heartwarming, and Sirius' hesitant way to accept it at once just makes it more hilarious. Potterheads always know that adult Sirius isn't one to stay true to his family characteristics, and it's good to see that he has always been this way, despite his tough exterior. Walburga's quick arrival, though, sucks all the excitement away at once. It shows just how authoritative she is over the Black household. No wonder the rest of the manor is just as gloomy. I also really like parts of Sirius' internal thoughts—it's like I'm seeing a hidden side of him, and I'm pretty enjoying that.