𝐑𝐄𝐕𝐈𝐄𝐖𝐒 : 𝐂𝐋𝐎𝐒𝐄𝐃
So, what is your OC like?
Are they realistic and original, or cliché and overpowered?
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Age: 17 Birth Date: April 2nd Astrology Sign: Aries
Birth Place: Guns and Knives Avenue, Viletown Currently Living In: Goodness' Sake Street, VileTown Not a lot of people mention where the town their character is living in, much less the place they were born in, so nice work on this one!
Species: Human Race: East Asian Citizenship: The Vile
Everything looks good in this section.
FAMILY
Father: Jokiyu Asumiya His name is very unique and satisfying to pronounce! I like it! Age: 38 Relationship: Hiroto neither hates nor is scared of his father; he's outright terrified of the older man--at first. But over the years, Hiroto begun to love and see his father for who he truly is; a good man with a bad rep.
Hiroto has an interesting yet unique relationship with his father, so good work on originality!
Short bio: Jokiyu was supposed to be in prison for multiple charges; such as 'robbery' and 'child abuse'. But was sent to a mental asylum instead. The man has dyed blonde hair and dangerously dark brown eyes with freckled skin almost as dark as his eyes--his real hair is black. He held many deranged beliefs due to his declining mental state. He's rumoured to once be a member of a terrorist cult known simply as, 'Harbingers'. Due to the type of woman he's met in his life, he's become a sexist.
This explains why Hiroto was terrified of his father at first.
Is there a reason why Jokiyu was sent to a mental asylum instead of a prison? I'm assuming that the robbery and child abuse he did wasn't too extreme, but still required attention, which is why he ended up in a mental asylum.
It would also be good to specify a bit more on his crimes. Which child did he abuse? How did he abuse them? What did Jokiyu steal and how much?
Mother: Hitomi Kimo-Jacques Age: 32 Relationship: Hitomi has quite a lot of animosity towards her son while Hiroto loves his mother (initially).
