Barrister Babu fanfiction awards 2022
A fanfiction award for all the anidita lovers.
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Book: Barrister Babu New Era Taken in contest by: Preeti Preeti_19_ Judge: Kiara kiarasfitoor
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TOTAL: 54.5/100
Okay so I'll have to be brutally honest here, though I'm not a professional writer but still, I'm not here to flatter, I'm here to say for your betterment.
Overall Plot - 5/10 To start with, the plot was nice, but there were many point where it was just so rushed, that I couldn't fathom what's happening, and you just showed ALOT of it in just one chapter, which is not needed, take it slow, describe the moments and enjoy it yourself, much needed.
Language and style - 3/10 Style, first of all, the use of emojis! Writer do not! It is so irritating like after every line or even before that, I find so damn many emojis in front of me, which just ruins the essence of even romantic scenes, for ex. You wrote a romantic moment, all well, but the use of (😍,😘,😘, 💃,💐) amidst the scene just changes the whole thing. Romance is supposed to be felt by heart, by the reader as well as the writer. Not just this, if you portrayed angst, you used (😡,😠,😤) these emojis, and for an emotional scene you used crying emojis. I don't appreciate this as I felt no emotions or attachment towards the story. And language, the use of commas is so frequent, even at the places you shouldn't.
Grammar -5.5/10 There are quite a frequent spelling errors, which need to be edited. Then, this was frequently used to show what time of the day was going on, 'in evening', 'in night! No, it's supposed to be, 'at evening', 'at night. The chapters are in a dire need to be edited.
Description of scenes - 2/10 No descriptions! I don't think I'm supposed to mark more than 5 on this one. Cuz there was no description, none. You just told what time of day was going on, no elaboration. And I've deducted so many marks for, when you described 'moon, another emoji was there, (🌚), this one. Even for the sun, no description but only an emoji. And then, you used pictures, okay. But so many pics! Like you need to describe it with words, create an imagery of what the person is wearing, but rather, after every line you drop a pic. Even with the expressions, please elaborate.
Cover - 6/10 It can be much better.
Blurb - 8/10 I really like the blurb.
Emotional attachment - 5/10 For I couldn't connect, as after every line or amidst it, the emojis just ruined the essence of romance, emotional, angst. et cetera et cetera.
Originality.- 7/10 That scene where you brought the lookalike of bondita, seemed so like an ITV cliche.
Character development - 8/10
Overall enjoyment - 5/10 As I said above, try to improve sweetie, you'll rock.
Total - 54.5/100 Another thing I'd say is, I'm really really new to this judging thing, I just pointed out what I thought it lacked, whatever I wrote is for your betterment, I hope you keep this in mind and don't hate me please, lol. Keep writing! You've got the skills.
Love, Kiara❤️
Note - as I know, that @Preeti_19_ is not the original writer of the story, and she has permission from the original writer to post her works on this platform, and to apply the book in this award thingy. So I would suggest preeti to reach out to the original writer and send her this review, I hope it helps.
