Entry #7: Love Me 'Till the Rain is Gone by life-of-words

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Story: Love Me 'Till the Rain is Gone

Author: life-of-words

My first impression of this story was a good one. It came from the fact that the title had an appropriately placed ' in it. 'Till around the internet and teens today is usually spelled just till. I appreciated the '. Little things amuse me.

In the first sentence, the word notice is used, but it should be noticed since the rest of the narration is in past tense. Somewhere in the second chapter there is the word "nay" but by context it should be any, simple typo. Also, at one point Drew is refered to as her. Since she goes by Drew for a while it might just be at the end of that getting sorted out. I'm not quite sure. There was a line in there about the room/office and pictures that could use some formatting. 

This story sounds like it could go places though, at one point it felt a little slow, but it soon picked back up. I am really wondering what that bus is exactly. After reading what I have I realized how the title fits. Cool. 

I read three chatpers, but I shall possibly read more later.

Random side note; thank you for getting me to get my butt back in gear with this contest!!

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