Story: In Between
Author: xxQueeNxx
A nice start was reading the blurb. It sounded decent, and by that I feel that this story might be able to get somewhere...if it weren't for the horrible grammar. I'm not trying to be mean, but it *really* needs work. It switches from past tense to present tense and back within sentences, and sometimes multiple times.
For anyone who can stand to read like that, I'd say give it a try. The idea sounds cool, but phrases like "any of them guys" kill my brain. Any of those guys or any of the guys would have been fine, but not any of them guys, just as an example.
I read one chapter, and the beginning of the first page of the next before I decided I couldn't take the grammar anymore. It wasn't the story, may I emphasize that more. The story is decent, just not the method being used to tell it.
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