The Aster Awards 2023 [CLOSED]

: ̗̀➛ FANTASY

1. Slice of (magic) Life by Azuriko_Kito

Title 9/10

Cover 7/10

Blurb 10/10

Plot 13/15

Creativity 12/15

Grammar 14/15

Characters 4.5/5

Interaction with reader 3/5

Overall 14.5/15

Total: 87/100

Review: It has a lovely flow of pace and a good choice of words, yet there's so much to get through and the chapters are long. It's not a bad thing, but for myself - who's Dyslexic, I had to push through the chapters and I think there might be someone who also will feel the same. Try setting yourself a word goal, meaning you only need to say 10000 words in this chapter and then only 100 in this one. Another suggestion is to go through your story with a fine-comb and be strict with yourself, do I need this or not? Ask people's opinions on the story and ask if any places should change - this is what I do with my writing. I know you're still busy with this amazing story, but keep my advice in the back of your mind, so that when you need it, it's there.

2. Death of Hope by SKVokey

Title 9/10

Cover 4.5/10

Blurb 5/10

Plot 13/15

Creativity 13/15

Grammar 13/15

Characters 3.5/5

Interaction with reader 4/5

Overall 12/15

Total - 77/100

Review: You're writing style I envy. This is not to say there aren't places you can improve. The pace of the story seems slow. You give too much detail - which is not a bad thing, but sometimes you need to choose when to give detail or just give a short description. The story should flow like the wind or the waves in the ocean, don't cut and stop phrases - this goes for your blurb as well. Also, I love how you're telling the reader about your world with small info nested in your writing. I would only say, try not to give too much info about the world in the beginning - such as the Prologue, leave the scene of mystery for the reader and give out information when needed. I suggest using a website/app called Grammarly. It's extremely helpful in improving someone's work to sound how they want it.

3. Dance with Me Devil by Werepanther

Title 7/10

Cover 8/10

Blurb 7.5/10

Plot 12/15

Creativity 13/15

Grammar 12.5/15

Characters 3.5/5

Interaction with reader 3/5

Overall 11/15

Total 79.5/100

Review: I do not read sm*t or stories that have s*x scenes, but I have to say. You have this way of hooking the reader with your style of writing. It's a fast pass and has a good amount of description. Need I say more? I would only suggest trying Grammarly, this will help push your story to another level, which I believe you'll achieve.