The Aster Awards 2023 [CLOSED]

: ̗̀➛ DYSTOPIA

1. White Trash by DankMemesTTCaricom

Title - 9/10 points 

Cover - 8/10 points 

Blurb - 7/10 points 

Plot - 9/15 points 

Creativity - 12/15 points 

Grammar - 10/15 points 

Characters - 3/5 points 

Interaction with the reader - 3/5 points 

Overall- 10/15 points 

Total points - 71/100 points 

Review: I relate to the setting quite a bit, I hate to admit, though you could see this in my own writing really. Though I loved this I feel it was a tad overdone or drawn out too long in way to describe the world. It suffers from info dumping, so to speak - which I'm actually bad at sometimes myself - as well as over description of sorts, messy/over use of adjectives. Some of the characters do suffer from traumas I believe are exaggerated or done in an "in your face" kind of way but I suppose that's what the mature rating is for. Some of it could also just be a bit more organized. I really enjoyed the unique atmosphere set up at the beginning of this story and enjoyed its raw descriptions and characters at their base nonetheless. It certainly brought me into the world and made me feel for the characters.

2. MS Mystery: The Truth of Me by MsOnirique

Title - 10/10 points 

Cover - 10/10 points 

Blurb - 9/10 points 

Plot - 10/15 points 

Creativity - 12/15 points 

Grammar - 11/15 points 

Characters - 2/5 points 

Interaction with the reader - 3/5 points 

Overall- 10/15 points 

Total points - 77/100 points 

Review: The sentences don't seem to quite run off of each other and feel more like thought fragments that bounce around at some points. The chapters are a bit short, which isn't a problem, but I think the world or characters could've been expanded on easily without info dumping too much. A little deeper interaction between them and the world around them to help the reader imagine they're really there and actually get to know these characters. Some grammar errors, abbreviations and overused words/phrases mostly that make the writing slightly bland or messy. All this together takes me away from the scene taking place making it difficult to fully immerse myself in and relate to the characters and their stories. Aside from this I believe the descriptive words that are used could really make the story pop as well as the character's emotions. I love crime novels myself and could see this story having that thrilling mystery it advertises with a little fine tuning.

3. Pokemon: Rise Against by Sarnick18

Title - 9/10 points 

Cover - 9/10 points 

Blurb - 8/10 points 

Plot - 12/15 points 

Creativity - 12/15 points 

Grammar - 12/15 points 

Characters - 3/5 points 

Interaction with the reader - 3/5 points 

Overall- 12/15 points 

Total points - 80/100 points 

Review: Descriptive, sometimes too descriptive, you don't need big fancy words to make your story sound smart. Sometimes they're distracting to the reader. Could also describe the Pokémon's original designs a little for those who might not know the series to help picture them better, the descriptions of the changes to them though are well done. This was well written if only a little long, chapters could be broken down more.

4. Kolibrie: The Novel by Exequinne

Title - 9/10 points 

Cover - 9/10 points 

Blurb - 9/10 points 

Plot - 13/15 points 

Creativity - 13/15 points 

Grammar - 12/15 points 

Characters - 4/5 points 

Interaction with the reader - 3/5 points 

Overall- 13/15 points 

Total points - 85/100 points 

Review: Well written first draft, not much to complain about aside from grammatical errors; unnecessary "be" verbs and some wrong tense uses maybe. The characters are relatable and I liked their interactions with one another. Maybe could use the slightest bit of world building, a little more description of what they see/ hear around them, not just feel, but it's not enough to take from the immersion. The action scenes are done well and keep me wanting to read what happens to them next as well as the characters emotions.

5. The Right To Die by avadel

Title - 10/10 points 

Cover - 10/10 points 

Blurb - 10/10 points 

Plot - 13/15 points 

Creativity - 13/15 points 

Grammar - 13/15 points 

Characters - 5/5 points 

Interaction with the reader - 5/5 points 

Overall- 14/15 points 

Total points - 93/100 points 

Review: I usually like to find something wrong with a story, because no one is perfect after all, but I honestly have little I think could be fixed about this. It's immersive and well described with very little, if any, grammar errors. I love the science-fantasy mixture, while still being in this realm, so much as well as the unique creativity of the plot in general. Sure it's not perfect but it's really well written with clear thought put into the writing and editing.

══════・❃・WINNERS・❃・══════

First Position - The Right To Die by avadel

Second Position - Kolibrie: The Novel by Exequinne

Third Position - Pokemon: Rise Against by Sarnick18

══════・❃・CONGRATS・❃・══════

Thank you everyone for your cooperation and also a special thanks to  lookinprettyGrim for judging this genre!

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