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1. The Island by Werepanther

Title - 7/10

Cover - 5/10

Blurb - 7/10

Plot - 12/15

Creativity - 13/15

Grammar - 12/15

Characters - 4/5

Interaction with reader - 3.5/5

Overall Enjoyment - 12/15

Total: 75.5/100

Review: While the title and cover undermined the plot of your story, I love how the last scene is bone-chilling. It was also unexpected to find this story from a resident's POV and not the witch's or her "fiancé's". I'm keen to know more about this story. 


2. Love Letter's by ArabelaTaylor

Title - 5/10

Cover - 7/10

Blurb -  1/10

Plot - 9/15

Creativity - 9/15

Grammar - 2/15

Characters - 3/5

Interaction with reader - 2/5

Overall Enjoyment - 5/15

Total: 45/100

Review: I think I've read this before...hmm. 

The story is in dire need of editing: I can't comprehend what's happening. And what you've posted as a blurb is not called a blurb, but a premise. It sets the themes, but I have no idea who the characters are, nor am I given a hint of the challenges they face in this story. 


3. Let It Out by Azuriko_Kito

Title - 8/10

Cover - 8/10

Blurb - 6/10

Plot - 13/15

Creativity - 9/15

Grammar -  13/15

Characters - 4/5

Interaction with reader - 4/5

Overall Enjoyment - 12/15

Total: 76/100

Review: 'Let It Out' was a sweet YA slice-of-life story. I liked Damien's progress from 'No. 1 threat' to 'No. 1 fan' and the smooth flow of the story itself. It could've been shorter, since it's a short story, but you've done a great job overall.


4. Short stories for the Halloween Bash by Kanhakisakhi

Judged 'The Captive Girl in a Doll'.

Title -  7/10

Cover - 4/10

Blurb - 6/10

Plot - 5/15

Creativity - 4/15

Grammar - 11/15

Characters - 2/5

Interaction with reader - 3/5

Overall Enjoyment - 6/15

Total: 49/100

Review: I'm not terrified or intrigued at all, after reading this story. The blurb did get me a bit hyped up, but the plot was a major let-down. I didn't come across any challenges in the story....Lily's parents could get her out with just a benevolent witch. 


5. Sincerely Alyson by footnoteofhappiness

Title - 9/10

Cover - 8/10

Blurb - 8/10

Plot - 12/15

Creativity - 12/15

Grammar - 10/15

Characters - 4/5

Interaction with reader - 4/5

Overall Enjoyment - 11/15

Total: 78/100

Review:  I really liked how you've narrated this story via letters. It brings out the character's unique voice and personality, plus the short and succinct parts elevate the plot and give the jaw-dropping response to the ending. There are a few minor errors, in terms of punctuation and sentence structure, but it didn't pose as a challenge to read. 


══════・❃・WINNERS・❃・══════

First Position - Sincerely Alyson by footnoteofhappiness

Second PositionLet It Out by Azuriko_Kito

Third Position - The Island by Werepanther

══════・❃・CONGRATS・❃・══════

Thank you everyone for your cooperation and also a special thanks to  RookWri78 for judging this genre!

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