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LeTomatoPotato~ The Sculptor: Creepypasta OC

Name ~ Aileen Orvianti
nice
CP Name ~ The Sculptor
I like it. very original.
Saying ~ "You'll be my next masterpiece"
oooooooh creepy
Bio ~ Aileen was a lonely little girl, who lived in an apartment with just her mother. Her parents had divorced, and her father wanted nothing to do with her. Aileen's mother did everything to make her happy, and taught her sculpting and pottery every week.
On her 10th (young- maybe a little too young?) birthday, she was brought to her mothers friends bakery. The owners name was Mina, and she was instructed to take care of Aileen. Instead, she got drunk, abused her, and destroyed her most prized possession: A kitten sculpture, which her mother had given her.
one little thing- the kitten sculpture at the bakery and not at home? why?
Aileen knew she had enough, and knocked her onto the ground, and began punching her until she was finally dead.
Filled with rage, she stuffed her hand down Mina's throat, taking out anything she could find ( intestines, guts, etc. ). damn. somehow I can't believe a 10 year old did this (also how did she manage to grab everything without slicing her open a little?)
She then baked the remains of Mina's body, molding it with some dough she found, and making a replica of the kitten sculpture.
again- DAMN
Her mother then found out what she had done, and abandoned her, frightened and terrified. Aileen then grew insane inside that bakery, (she lived there? wouldn't the police find her?) always feeling both regretful and sad.

Father ~ Calum Orvianti ( Alive )
Mother ~ Viera Lennins ( Alive )
THEYRE ALIVE!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!
Other Family ~ None.
k
Looks ~ Aileen has auburn hair in a side ponytail, sorta tan skin, and hazel eyes.
NO MORE VAMPIRE LOOK
NO MORE VAMPIRE LOOK
YAYYYYY SHES REAL
Clothes ~ For her clothing, she wears a maroon purple button up shirt, black leggings, a dark brown apron, and dark gray boots.
SIMPLE AND CUTE BUT NOT TOO CUTE I LIKE IT
DOB ~ May 20th
YAY
NO MORE HALLOWEEN BDAYS
Weapon ~ Her hands, electric saws
Electric saws? wouldn't that make too much noise?
Weaknesses/Flaws ~ Aileen isn't good at dodging far ranged attacks, and prefers to improvise, rather than already coming up with a plan/strategy.
this would be more bio and not flaws... I would think more like fatal flaws from PJO
She's usually way too overconfident during a fight,
yes. better.
and because of that, she prefers to go solo or fight independently, refusing to have any help.
okay again kind of bio
Likes ~ Fighting, Seafood, Technology, Kittens, Coffee, Sculpting, Pottery, Quiet Places/Things
check
Dislikes ~ Sweets, Nature, Dogs, Screams, Alcohol, Singing
good

RESULTS:

Mary Sue scale: 28%
Pork Chop: 34%
Originality: 77%

Sentence: I like it, can you just mold a little more originality into it?