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Drug Addict Damaris Creepypasta OC

for @That_Writing_Person

Name:  Damaris ,Patricia, Clarkson

never seen a name w/ commas before

CP Name:  Drug Addict Damaris

sounds more like a nickname but ill roll with it

Saying:  "It's a party. Chillax, it'll be fun... For me."

lololol I'm laughing to keep myself from being scared because I may or may not be home alone rn...

Bio: Damaris was a drug addict, like most of her party friends. Ever since she remembered she could drink, she's been going to parties 24/7.(so... like 2? she can drink at age 2. unless you mean drink alcohol which means shes an adult which means different standards. specification matters. ois she an underage drinker or legit legal) Most of her friends drunken states weren't dangerous.  Most. Her childhood friend Brandon's state was very dangerous and after his first try, he vowed never to get drunk again (ooh what happened).Of course, a drunk Damaris (ok is her name Damaris or patricia or is patricia her middle name? because why are there commas?)could very easily change that. She managed to get him, but also threw a few insults at him. Angering the man, he started to go crazy. At the end, she had a cut right from her forehead, to her collar bones in the middle of her face. Many cuts placed over her body, a gory sight indeed. It was a party home, and everyone left without Damaris.{ ;(  } She now haunts the place as a building ghost. (So she died and now shes a ghost? kinda typical...)

Father: Blake Clarkson (Alive)

YAY

Mother: Addison Clarkson (Alive)

YESS YESSSS

Other Family: Nothing, except extended family

ok

Looks: Damaris has dirty blonde hair, transparent skin, (of course.) one huge cut in the middle of her face (forehead to collarbone) and multiple stabs, wounds, and cuts all over her body. Faded brown eyes.

everything except transparent skin is good

Clothes: A ripped up tank top, and ripped ripped jeans

makes sense since she was stabbed. its good too. she can move in them and theyre not too fashionable

DOB: February 19

normal for once

Weapon: Possessing, and a kitchen knife (what else are you going to find at party home?)

BEEP BEEP KITCHEN KNIFE ALERT

I SEE WHY SHES USING A KITCHEN KNIFE BUT STILL

POSSESSING FINE WHATEVER KINDA TYPICAL BUT NOT AS TYPICAL AS KITCHEN KNIFE

Strengths: Ghost stuff

what the hell is that supposed to mean

Weaknesses/Flaws: Daylight, vacuums, suction things, glass, fish, coldness, still drunk when inside a person, so is a little bit of a slow thinker, cocky/overconfident

fish? *shakes head* I don't want to know.

Likes: Alcohol, food, parties, herself, technology

how is a ghost supposed to use technology

Dislikes: Milk, camping, bugs, perfection, symmetry, cats

how can a ghost camp. bugs should go right through A GHOst.

ok how does she kill? and why? what are her motives? youre missing the stuff to make her a complete creepypasta. rn I have a good story of how a girl was brutally murdered and now haunts people.

Results:

mary sue: 56%

pork chop: 40%

originality: 66%

sentence:

your whole creepypasta section just got stabbed with an overused knife and now haunts the knife