Is YOUR OC a MARY SUE??/Story Reviews

@vikitiki2002 ~Victoria Parks

Name: Victoria Parks
yay it's a normal name and not some Greek stupid name
Age: 13 years old
little average but whatever
Godly parent(s): Daughter of Apollo, legacy of Nike
good good good
choice weapon: She is quite strong, so she can battle with almost any weapon, but a long Imperial Bronze sword and bow and arrow (Apollo's blessing) are her favourites
wait I thought she had nikes blessing and Apollo was her dad?
She's loud and hyperactive.
ADHD I'm guessing.
She can be very annoying and stubborn. She is funny and sassy (you can't talk to her more than 3 sentences without her correcting or making fun of you). She's quite irresponsible and lazy, as well as really clumsy. She may seem that she doesn't care what you think, but she cares, for she has a quite low self-esteem. She hates giving up (stubbornishness).
good she's not too perfect but not too corrupt

Her fatal flaw is irresponsibility.
never seen that one before nice
She has brown shoulder-length tousled hair and brown eyes. She has rosed cheeks and a few freckles.
what the heck is rosed. do you mean rosy?
Outside CHB, she wears sweaters/t-shirts with folded jeans/shorts and ordinary shoes (no converse). Outside CHB, she wears CHB t-shirt with folded shorts.
there's 2 outside chbs.
im gonna guess the second one is supposed to be inside?
Likes: having fun with friends, listening to music, playing guitar, basketball.
good
Dislikes: boredom, giving up, quiet people (with exceptions)
good
Bio: Lived with both her parents until she was 5, when her mother died in a quest (read my book to find out!), 😂😂😂😂😂yes ma'am
and lived with her father in NY until she was 13, when a "monster" (a quite special one, but I'm not saying which) forced her and a couple of friends to CHB.
okay so the bio could have a few more details. like why was her mom on a quest? was she a daughter of Nike is that why she has legacy of Nike? how did she get to CHB? a little more detail pls but I certainly will read your book to find out

results:

Mary Sue scale: 23%
pork chop: 17%
originality: 91%

sentence: are you sure your not a daughter of Athena you smarty pants?