Flaws in Fanfics Percy Jackson Edition

Battles

How a battle should be
(From me book)

Now

Nick unsheathed his sword.
"Come on kid ya know you can't beat me"
"Let's see about that"
He charged . The shadows danced around him shifting and changing. The man blocked his attack with ease. They went on at incredible speed .They broke apart leaving some distance between them. Nick looked down at his arm blood The man didn't even have a scratch on him.
Why'd I get stuck with this mission Krystal is somewhere in Hawaii Cilica is in London Sam is still at The Academy probably taking a nap Blairs in New York Will is also still at The Academy Tori is in France and me I'm stuck on a remote island in the middle of the Pacific Ocean. He willed the shadows to start attacking. The man dodged every last one.Nick disappeared into the shadows. He appeared behind the man and was about to stab him when.....The man blocked the sword without even turning around.
Oh just my luck I get stuck fighting a guy who is no doubt better than me
They engaged in another round of swordplay. They parried and blocked continuously. Then at last Nick saw an opening. He sent his shadow charging toward him. Snaking it's way towards the guys slowly rising and strangling him.

Haha not one of the best battle scenes in the book but *shrugs*

I like charged at the monster and killed like I was so badass I didn't even have a scratch

Now the the differences are very obvious Aqua came out of the battle looking as perfect as ever while Nick .....a lot of scratches a bad wound in his arm and also crankiness (yes crankiness is the worst wound you can get) AND YOU SIMPLY DONT JUST KILL A MONSTER IN THREE SECINDS