Flaws in Fanfics Percy Jackson Edition

Donde Está el Caos

(I conjugated wrong didn't I? Oops. Stupid Estar. NO it's right. Yeah it's right. ITS RIGHT)

      Percy Jackson was a highly accomplished hero. He had fought monsters and brought down evil tyrants galore. He had the *fake cough* perfect *fake cough* life. His girlfriend was amazing. His friends were always there for him. Everything was fine

Until one day.

Percy wakes up to find a boy his age, his brother. It doesn't help that everyone fell for him instantly. Poseidon himself had come to claim the boy. Within a few days he had even Chiron wrapped around his finger. Percy could understand why. His brother was unnaturally charming. Charming to the pint at which even Percy couldn't dislike him completely. He was tolerated for a while. Everything came tumbling down after that.

A day worth of endless activity later Percy found himself walking in on his Annabeth in a very intimate moment with his half brother. His friends had already tore themselves away from him but thsi was his breaking point. Shouting, Percy ran. He left. He couldn't stand it much more. Totally abandoning his "friends" he left camp.

He could go home. To his mom. He would. Percy returned home to find two sickening corpses. He collapsed. His world had crumbled before his very eyes.

As he got up and called the police a deep voice erupted behind him. A man stood dressed all in black.

"Hello Perseus Jackson. I'm Chaos"

Laziest crap I have ever written

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