I apologize, I don't do OC reviews anymore. This OC is my very first Creepypasta OC, so I've decided to review it. I made it several months ago, and it's pretty bad. Here we go!
Name: Lover
(That just doesn't make sense. Why)
Age: 15
(Overused)
Gender: Female
(Most of my OCs are female)
Weapon: Bow and Arrow+Dual Swords
(How would that work?)
Hair Color: Orange
(Not horrible)
Hair Style: Above shoulders with side bangs
(Every single one of my older OCs has this same hairstyle)
Eye Color: One yellow one red
(Two different colored eyes is uncommon, but still possible. And really? Yellow and red?)
Signature Outfit: Cyan hoodie with ripped black leggings and lime green converse
(Hoodie+leggings+converse=Mary Sue outfit)
Signature Saying: Love is forever, right?
(WHY)
Siblings: One sister named Eden
(Great. But is she older? Younger? Twin?)
Parents: Has abusive parents
(*sigh*)
Tattoos: Has a sword tattoo on her wrist and a bow and arrow tattoo on her other wrist
(Back when I was obsessed with giving every OC a crap ton of tattoos. Why does she have all these?)
Body Mods: Permanant Fangs, nose piercing, lip piercing, eyebrow piercing, ear piercings, scarification of the word insanity on back, sword line drawing burnt into shoulder.
(ENOUGH WITH THE FANGS! IF THEY AREN'T A WEAPON, DON'T USE THEM!)
Killing Method: Shoots with arrows to weaken if they run away, before using swords for the final blow
(Does she only kill people in the park?)
Other Stuff: Has freckles and scars that cover her body
(That's really generic)
Backstory: She was perfectly normal and had green eyes. (Yeah, okay cool) Her sister was always crazy but on one particular night it got a little out of hand. (ENOUGH WITH INSANE SIBLINGS) Her parents had just finished abusing her. They hated her and loved her 17 year old sister. (That's really cliche) They would burn her, cut her, punch her, kick her, strangle her, and hit her with things. (Well, that's abuse) She came out of the garage after a particularly bad abusing with several burns on her back, several cut scars all over her body, bruises, two bad black eyes, a bleeding ear, and bite marks all over her body from a vicious bulldog. (Okay, where did they find says bulldog?) Her sister attacked her and held her into the ground holding a knife to her neck. (*SIGH*) Maxton grabbed the knife out of her weak sisters hand and repeatedly stabbed her in the eye and stomach until her body became limp and lifeless. (Because, eye stabbings) Her parents came out to see their beloved daughter murdered by the daughter they hated. Maxton stabbed and killed her parents and wrote on the wall in blood, Love is forever, right? (This saying just sucks) And ran off leaving the knife behind. Her green eyes became yellow and red and she changed her name to Lover. (Why did her eyes change color? Why did she choose that name?)
Well this OC sucks. I remember thinking that I really wanted to make the OC super creative and original, with s really original weapon, and a "cool" name. Yeah that failed. How are those weapons productive in any way? Why did she choose Lover as her name? Where did the saying, "Love is forever, right?" come from? Why did her eyes just randomly change color? I thought that this if was really good at first. Creative hair color, what I thought was a creative eye color before finding it was overused, uncommon weapon, yeah no.
If give this OC a 1.25/10 only because she's not the worst I've seen.
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