Webkinzluver5 Reads:Starkit's Prophecy

Chapter three the Battle 4 the caln

  thx jazzie-kun 4 th good review! (Do you mean FOR the good review or the 4th good review?) and stop flmaing the stroy!1 i bet u cant right such a good story!1!1 (Actually yes I can.Just ask the readers of The O.C. Hunger Games)

StarPaw walkd over too the appentice's den. Insid she saw her sister's FlamePaw and lakePaw and hr frend JazzPaw (a.n: jazzie-kin ur my bff!) waz slepping on the mos. (Slepping?)

"JazzPaw get up." She cried. (No need to be loud) JazzPaw opend her brlliaint blu eyes and looked at hr.

"Do yo want 2 go on pattrol wit me?" she asked. (You can't do that.You're an apprentice.You also don't know the territory)

"Sure!" Said JazzPaw getten up from the moss. They leavt and went two the entrnse too camp.

But then, a cat came in thru the entrnce! It was BlackStar!1!11 (No need for the 1's.Everyone knows that there is only one cannon ShadowClan cat named Blackstar.Also FINALLY THERE IS SOMEONE HERE TO TALK SENSE INTO THIS IDIOTIC APPRENTICE!Or should I say 'apentice'.)

"Shadowclan are attaking!" She yelled. (How do you know that?There's only Blackstar!) All the cats came out from there dens. She jumped on a cat and clawd him and he ran of. (WHAT.WHAT.SHE'S AN APPRENTICE FOR STARCLAN'S SAKE.THAT IS NOT POSSIBLE.Also did she just claw a cat that came out from the dens? XD)

"Good job StarPaw!" FireStar called, "The last cat i new that culd fiht lik that was SandStrom. (Tron Legacy.Also,what?!Firestar are you suddenly not loyal to Sandstorm anymore?) Your a good fihter!" (No she's not.She's literally the dictionary definition of Mary-Sue)

StarPaw was happy. She wus a good fihgter! Maybey this was wat the prophcy meant. (There's no Tigerstar or Hollyleaf.And there's no darkness.You have proven you are an idiot)

thnkx and ples no more flams (OK I won't flame *not*.But this chapter is just...WOW.I can't even begin to describe this.Let's just say I was close to head-desking)