Webkinzluver5 Reads:Starkit's Prophecy

Chapter Three The Traning Under The Star

(Didn't we literally just have a chapter 3 in the last part?)

  OMGOSH GUkys im so sorry but SOMEONE glares at rainy days FLAMED ME AND I GOT REALLY HURT. OKKAY IF you dont LIKE thestor y you dont have to readit u know. (I know I don't have to read the story.It's just amusing to watch all of this unfold)

Chapter Three The Traning Under The Stars (You put that in the title...)

Shadowclan run from the camp. (Since when was SC even IN the camp?) StarPaw smiled. Shed one! (Is she shedding a tear?Also you did NOT win!You were cheating,you ugly Mary Sue!) Noone cod hurt her family now . (Actually a lot of things/cats can still hurt your family *coughcough*TIGERANDHOLLY*coughcough*,foxes,monsters,Twolegs...really there are about 100 different ways your family could get hurt)

StarPaw!" said FireStar. "Its time we train!" (Didn't you guys JUST finish fighting a battle?) I want to show you how to fight!" (Clearly you are blind)

"Ok." Sad StarPaw happl;y. (How are you sad AND happy?) "but yo (They even learned slang!What next,do they learn how to operate rockets?) just saw I culd fight, write?" (THEY LEARNED HOW TO WRITE EVEN BETTER!!) "Well, ya." said FireStar. "But I wnted tol see if that was all you new."

"Ok." They went to the frost (Is it leaf-bare already?) togather (Is it the gathering?) and the other cats cleaned jp the bodies. (What bodies?!I don't remember anyone dying!) "Ok StarPaw" said Firestar one they got their. "We'll start with how to dog." (Yes,Firestar!We're going to learn how to act like a dog!Maybe this skill would've helped when TC was fighting the dog pack!)

"Cmon thas too easy!" yelled StarPaw. (No need to yell :/) Shed just beat BlackStar she was ready for anything! (That grammar was SOO close to being perfect in this sentence...)

"ok Ok" mewled FiresTar, lets learn how to claw an oponit. (What's an oponit)

"Ya." Yowled Starkit (Wasn't she made an apprentice?) . She jumped at FireStar not Giving hiM time to attakc. "She hit his side he didn't move he was to surprise.d she clawed him and he started bledding. "wow StarPaw" he said ".Your doing awesome." (Wait,you're apprentice was fighting you with claws UNSHEATHED and hit you so bad that you're bleeding but you're saying she's doing AWESOME?!Also,I thought we were learning how to behave like a dog) "Really?" gaped StarPaw. (Don't be rude) She didn't think she was doing that god (She's even admitting she's a god!) was she relly special like the porphesy meowed? (A prophecy is a thing.An inanimate thought actually.It can't meow.)

"Yes StarPaw." Snarled Firestar. (Why are you snarling?Did you finally realize what Starpaw did?) "I couldnteven get away in fast enough. Only scourg was did that before.,"

"OMGOSH REALLY?" asked StarPaw. Scourg?1? (YES EVERYONE KNOW THERE IS ONLY ONE WARRIOR CATS CANNON SCOURGE THE ONE IS NOT NEEDED!!) THE SCOURG? She dherad so muchj about him he was really evil and killed alot of cats. (I think he only killed a few cats.That's not a lot.)"I'M LIKE SCOURG? "I didnt mean it like that" FirePaw (And we got sent back in time) sad fastly. (And Firepaw got sad really fast!) "I ment you wer a good fighter. Its really cool." At that minute he thought to himself 'Starpaws so kawaii look at her eys and her fur.(OH MY.NO.NO.BEYOND NO EVEN.The things wrong with this! a)Starpaw is Firestar's GREAT GRANDAUGHTER b)Firestar already has a MATE and KITS *who I guess don't exist in this story* c)THE AGE GAP PEOPLE ALWAYS REMEMBER THE AGE GAP!! and d)We are NOT in Japan!!)

"Oh ok thanks." They trained floor (They trained the floor...OK) awhile later StarPaw beat FireStar (And back to the present) 8 times (WHAT?!It's offical:FIRESTAR MUST RETIRE!!Either that or Starpaw is now deemed a Mary Sue once and for all) once she let him win to make him fel bettar and b y the last one she was alittle tired. (Look!She's tired!She isn't 100% Mary Sue after all!)

"Hey FireStar can we hunt now." Said StarPaw. "im kinda hungry." (I don't care.You must hunt for the Clan first.Or what,does nobody care about the sacred warrior code anymore?Cuz is so we need Hollyleaf to turn good again)

"Oh we'll if you want." Firestar was disappointed he and; starPaw had been having so much fun. So they went huntng, StarPaw messed up a couple times (SHE'S NOT COMPLETELY MARY SUE HALLELUJAH!) but FireStar said it was okaysince it was only her second time (she'd had her first time when she was a littlekit and she and FireStar had snuck out together that's why he chose her as his apprentice_. (WHAT?!Why would Firestar sneak out of camp with a queen's KIT?!Or what,does nobody care about what Starpaw does anymore because she's SOOOOOO special?)

Later that night StarPaw locked up at the stars. (She froze basically) She and Firestar had'd so much fun this day. Theyd brung back enough food for the hole clan. (THAT.IS.NOT.POSSIBLE!!YOU DESTROYED PROBABLY ABOUT HALF OF THE PREY POPULATION BY DOING THAT!Also,was ThunderClan renamed HoleClan while they were away?)

Locking upn at the stars she turned to her best friend, JazzPaw, and said, "Do you think well ever be up there." (Please no.StarClan shouldn't allow it)

"Ya totally." (Totally NOT!) Said JazzPaww. "I mean youll be l,eader and I'll be depudy one day well have too!" (No.You could always get sent to that place were kittypets,rogues,etc. get sent to after they die.Then Starclan AND The Dark Forest won't have to deal with you! :D)

"Ya." Said StarPaw smiling she loved JazzPaw NOT IN THAT WAY U SICKOS!) (No need to shout...) they were best friends. She loked up at the stars again and smiled and fell asleep wit the Starcaln voices whisper in her head.

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