My Honest Book Reviews [CLOSED]

Justice League Renegades

***I am now ranking books on a scale of 1-10 to give a more accurate rating***

Cover: 3/5

Genre: Fanfiction

Fandom: Batman/DC

Rating: PG

Chapters Read: 2

Summary:

Can a student kill his own mentor? That is what the public asks the Justice League when Nightwing is suspected of killing the Batman. The whole League is divided now and Titans can only pray for their former leader.Mystery and Suspense only gets deeper and deeper into the minds of our heroes when new players enter the brawl.

The summary isn't that bad, but it was a little disappointing. It's a very neat concept (since you all know I'm a Batman fanatic) but the summary was too plain (though worded pretty good) and didn't expand on the plot as much as it needed to. I mean, I'm all for keeping the mystery in the story under lock and key until the reader gets to the actual story, but not saying enough in the summary is just as bad. I will give the author props, though, since the grammar was perfect, save for the "that is what the public asks...", which could've been "that's what the public asks", and the incorrectly capitalized "Suspense".

6.5/10

Grammar:

There are a lot of grammar mistakes in this one, but not so much that I gave up on trying to understand the writing halfway. But the mistakes in simple grammar like word plurality/singularity, punctuation, and sentence flow are very damaging and worsen the reader's experience while reading the book. Also, I had an unbearably hard time trying to figure out who was speaking at times. A little "he said" or "she said" at the end of a line of dialogue shouldn't be that hard, right? All of the chapters I read required editing simply because of terrible grammar. Some other things: some sentences aren't consistent with the story's overall present tense, and the most terrible of all: lack of descriptions.

The story has an utter lack of them and I really can't bare it. Descriptions introduce the reader to the characters and the story's environment and feel. Without them, you're stuck in a neverending cycle of underwhelming and unengaging chapters with no real appeal. Sometimes, a simple story can do wonders, but unless you're an experienced and talented writer who knows what they're doing (which I can tell the author of this story really isn't), you shouldn't even attempt a shot at one. Besides, giving your readers a little extra to read and leaving them in awe after reading well-written descriptions isn't going to hurt, all it can do is help.

Really, all I can say in this category is that the grammar was terrible and requires editing, and should the author neglect to edit the book, the book will suffer greatly for this.

4/10

Plot:

Not bad. I don't know what I expected, but all I can say is that the few chapters that I read weren't bad at all. A conflict is established from the beginning and so are the characters. The overwhelming amount of names is downright confusing and hard to keep track of, and it would've been a lot better if the author took some time to specify each superhero's name instead of just throwing them around and expecting the reader to catch on, but for the most part, it doesn't distract too much from the actual plot. 

Moving on from that, I am a fan of the story's concept, since it's a very original one (points for originality), but I'm definitely not a fan of the story's execution. The dialogue isn't that good and could use improvement, and it's unclear to someone like me, someone who isn't that knowledgeable in non-Batman related characters like Supergirl and Superboy, exactly what the conflict is. I had no idea what was going on in the first chapter's first half since the mix of puzzling/not-so-good dialogue and grammatical errors made matters even worse. But, thanks to the rest of the chapter's dialogue, I was able to discern the conflict before I went on to the next chapter. 

5/10

Characters:

This is the story's not-so-silver silver lining. There are WAY too many characters to keep track of, but the ones that the author actually dedicates more than a sentence to are somewhat well-differentiated. I won't go into specifics, but characters like Jason Todd, Barbara Gordon, and the Titans stay true to their personalities and aren't all OOC. The characters were perhaps the only good aspect of this story (except for the story concept), and I applaud the author for putting effort into them.

7/10

Overall Rating (Out of 10 stars):

⭐ ⭐⭐⭐⭐

Note to @midnightmaniac:

Your story, and your writing, definitely need more improvement. Key parts you need to focus on are grammar and plot, and you NEED to edit your chapters before you even consider publishing them. Editing is key to writing anything, and the only way you can improve is by taking a second look at your writing and discerning mistakes and ways you can make your story better. From what I read, you definitely have some untapped potential. Keep up the good work and originality and keep finding ways to improve.

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