My Honest Book Reviews [CLOSED]

Making Her Happy

Cover: 8/10

Genre: Teen Fiction

Rating: PG-13

Chapters Read: 2

Summary:

Rylee Kensingten, the daughter of a high-profile CEO, had everything she could've ever wanted. But after a construction crane accident and a deadly car crash, she begins to realize things will never be the same. Putting the blame upon her shoulders, her life slowly down spirals.

That's until she meets Shawn O'Conner, the son of her dad's rival. After spending more and more time with her, he makes a shocking discovery that may or may not save Rylee's life.

As everything Rylee's ever known crumbles around her, can she ever find her way back to happiness?

The summary has no grammatical errors, something I've come to appreciate throughout my time on Wattpad. Just enough information is given to either interest or bore a reader (I'll disclose whether I felt the former or latter later on), which is good.

8/10

Grammar:

All of this dialogue. . . yet no punctuation. OH MY LORD, THREE BOOKS IN A ROW WITH NO. PUNCTUATION. AFTER. DIALOGUE. HAS IT COME TIME FOR ME TO LOSE ALL HOPE IN WATTPAD'S WRITERS???? 

Of course not, that's why I'm writing this review. But yes, that frustration you sensed is still burning within me, and  I definitely don't intend to brush it off. 

You NEED to put punctuation before you end dialogue. It completely throws off the reading experience and blatantly shows how inexperienced the author is. And even after you end dialogue with an exclamation point or a question mark, the sentence is still technically going on, so the word after the dialogue is not capitalized, unless it's a word like "I" or a proper name. 

Ex: "I told him not to ride his bike in the house, he didn't listen to me, and now we have this mess to show for it!" she exclaimed to her husband.

See that? That's exactly what you should do in terms of proper punctuation. 

Also, I noted that the author disclosed that the book wasn't edited, but as the purpose of this review is constructive criticism, I'm afraid that lack of editing will not protect this book from the wrath of my judgment. 

The vocab: not great, not bad. I admit that, as I'm a very picky reader with an affinity for high vocabulary, I was most definitely not amused with this book. It wouldn't hurt for the author to pick up a thesaurus. It really wouldn't.

One last thing: the book gets the most descriptive when it describes characters' physical appearances. I hate that. I really do. I strongly despise it when authors feel the need to describe how thick and silky their characters' hair are, or how prominent their cheekbones are, or how gorgeous their [insert unique eye color] eyes are. Maybe lay off on the physical descriptions a bit ...?

4.5/10

Plot:

I like originality. You guys know this. So it comes as no surprise that I was blown back by the uberinnovative plot this book had to offer. 

Not.

Books based on teenage girls with depression because of some tragic, tragic event in the past that they'd rather not talk about really just . . . kill me. Really, they're that bad.

Girl falls in love with her family's enemy?  You got it.

Girl needs a hot boy to pull her out of her depression? How did you know?

Boy is sooooo incredibly hot? Of course.

Girl's father is a CEO? Checkmate.

Cliches galore, wouldn't you say?

Now don't get me wrong, I don't mind cliches if they're executed correctly, but that was definitely not the case with this book. It personally felt like the thousands of other cliche Teen Fiction romance books on Wattpad that get thousands and millions of reads but are really the worst pieces of literature (if they can even be called that) ever to have been created. Now, I don't think this book is that bad because I consider the aforementioned legion of terrible Teen Fiction romance books rock bottom for any writer, and this book is not that. 

But I felt, while reading this book, that this book had the potential to fall either way: turn several cliches into an enjoyable story that's more than what it seems to be, or exactly what I described before:  a book with terrible characters, a terrible plot, and no creativity whatsoever.

Seeing that the book is not edited nor completed, there's still a chance for the author to turn this book around and get something actually good out of it. All I say is: heed my advice, won't you?

4/10

Characters:

I didn't care much for the characters. None of them stood out to me, no, not even the main character, and for as much as sharp as their cheekbones were and as light as their eyes were, I couldn't find it in myself to give a crap about them. And the dialogue between the characters?

Shoot me.

Dialogue can either make or break a book. Like I said before, characters are the pillars of a book, and if those characters are weak, can you really get surprised when the book falls on its face?

3/10

Overall Rating (Out of 10 stars):

⭐ ⭐⭐

Note to @raylenn98

I didn't enjoy your book, as I didn't enjoy the myriad of cliches and the underwhelming grammar. I see that area may be subjective, and that others might enjoy your story, but as cruel as what I'm about to say may seem, it's the truth: those people probably don't know jack about the difference between a good book and a bad one. But that's just my opinion.

Please, hear my advice and consider what I'm saying about your story. It'll definitely do you and your book a world of good.

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