Well, I swear that this is my honest option in your book and I don't believe in unnecessary burning so, erm, you're safe. Also if your book is based on any kind of show...please do tell me as I am not really a tv kind of person
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Title:Trapped In Despair Author:Yupphire Genre:Fantasy
Main Character: Yuki Akiyama
Other Characters: Akira (Yuki's roomie) ,Satomi (Yuki's teacher),Tamiko(mean girl) ,Masami,Hitomi
What is the main storyline: Its about a girl called, who is a witch.She finally went to a magic school after spending her whole life in non magic school and on her first lesson, she learns that her abilities (power of ice) are stringer than the rest of the people.However, because of her non magic school background, many people are weary of her and doubt her abilities.
Your cover page: Aww...its those type of cute cover pages...did you draw those girls yourself?If you did then, talent.If you didn't then...nice choice.Honestly the cover is nice,but a little dark...I did a little tweaking here...
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Yeah,THAT'S brighter.What I find is that bright books tend to draw a.more attention due to vibrancy so yeah.
Cover marks: hmmm it's nice so 8/10
How many chapters I read: There were 6 chapters and I read.....
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Comments on chapters: Honestly I love the way you write.At least its not those lame"and when I lifted up my hand ice flew out."So yeah.One of the best magic books.The book is easy to comprehend and interesting.I find details not overdone so that's really good.Basically, I like your style of writing and you're a good example that you don't need bombastic words to create a good story.
Advice: Not much really...the book was really good...just watch out for some run on and your grammar for ed or s.Just continue your style of wrong and don't slack.
WILL I RECOMMEND YOUR BOOK
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DEFINITELY.Especially to magic goers or people that is learning how to write.
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8/10!I love your book! 4/5 for language 4/5 for context
Please keep updating as I really want to see more of you!
For those who have read it, any suggestions for her?
Personally I think you should be more gung ho on advertising as this book deserves to be seen. All the best and it was a pleasure reading your book!
