I keep on forgetting about updating this book. I'm really sorry, here's a new chapter for you to make up for it.
This Mary Sue is called Miniza the Killer. You can already tell what wrong with this terrible OC? For starters, what is up with her hair? If she is really a killer like her name claims her to be, she is going to be easily caught with that wild hair.
Maybe her backstory gives us some hope? I don't know, let's find out.
"Story:
Miniza was bullied when little, then killed the bully when alone in the forest, after killed her whole family."
Of course, the usual "I was bullied, killed them, then killed my whole family. Feel bad for me uwu" spiel. All hope has been lost for this girl.
"Miniza is very powerful, brave and, beautiful."
WHY? WHY CAN'T SHE HAVE ANY FLAWS? YOUR OC IS NOT PERFECT, SHE'S HUMAN.
"She went to slenders mansion and met Jeff The Killer. Jeff loved her ever since they met. Slender also has feelings for Miniza."
The shipping with other pastas is really annoying. And the Slender Mansion is a fan made AU. While I do like it, don't incorporate your OC in it.
"When ever Miniza is mad her eyes turn to the slender sign and then she attacks you, with a single hit you will be dead."
How and why? I want an explanation.
"Jeff and Miniza are also in a relationship. Slender is mad at Jeff for that, but Miniza enjoys Jeff"
Love triangles tick me off already, but this is taking that hatred and shooting it through the roof.
"Stats:
Speed: 10/10
Power: 10/10
Intelligence: 10/10
Strength: 10/10"
I'm not even surprised by now.
Rating : God has abandoned us/10 on the Mary Sue scale.
