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His Destination

Story name: His Destination

Author: lost_soul7201

Genre: General Fiction.

Number of chapters: 13 so far and ongoing.Not completed.

Ok,So first things first-

>>>The title of the book- I would say the title 'His Destination' is a very simple and apt title for the book and it gives the readers a base and idea of what the story is going to be.So well done with that. I give you a 10/10 for that.

>>>Book Cover- The book cover is colourful.The picture potrayed also gives the readers an idea of what is going on in the story.The girl is showing the man love which is really the theme of the story.So thats fine.

But one thing is that it is too pixelly.The text is quite congested within the layout.Also you could use a better fond.

So for that 8.5/10.

>>>Story Description: Now Story description is what something that attracts readers to read the story along with the cover and title of the book.And these three things are the first things that a reader notices.

In this book,as description you have written out the various rankings of the book.Thats good.But the first description you provided is a turn off for readers.

You just mentioned the name of the main lead and asked them to join his journey.

Description is what most writers suffer with.But as a writer,I prefer to put a main cliffhanger part of the story as the description of the book.This builts up curiousity among the readers and they get an urge to read out what is exactly going on.

So note that down and write a better description. Let the ranking of the book be there because they are your achievements.Don't take that down.
For that 6/10.

>>>Prologue- The one thing that I really loved about the book is the prologue.Even though it had a bit of punctuation mistakes,the prologue surely attracted me to read the story further.

Also you have provided a casting for the characters and gave a small description of the what the charecter thought about love and life.

P.S.The cast you chose was also really good.

So 9.5/10.

>>>Plot- Eventhough the plot of the story builts up a little slow it is steady.I would not say that the plot is a entirely new and unique plot but you sure have made it different in your own way.There has been a few unique chapter but I still haven't seen a wow factor.

There is still time becuase the book is not completed yet and so I can't judge you too quickly in that one.

The marking is for the plot so far.It may increase if the plot develops more when the book gets completed.

7.5/10

>>>Character development- The female lead is potrayed a typical Indian college student who cares for her family and strives to achieve her dream.She undergoes various new emotions as the plot approaches but as of till now.i.e, till the 13th chapter,the female lead has shown only a few change in her charecter.She stills stands with her morals and ethics.Maybe her character will develop  even more as the story continues.

The male lead is shown as a typical rich yet lonely boy aka the heartthrobe of the college.But unlike the other stories,here he is not a player.He respects women and is a "one woman man."

He has major anger issues and is quite possessive. At first he is potrayed as a dork but then as the story goes,his charecter develops drastically.He is perfectly potrayed as the lead till now.

(I hope he don't mess up in the future chapters.Fingers crossed.)

I really appreciate you author for this one and I give you a 9.5/10.

>>>Story telling- The first part of the book is written in Third person's Point of View.But that has also potrayed what the characters were feeling.

Then as the story developed, characters point of view also started to come.That is good because the readers will be excited to know the characters mind.

I give you 9/10 for that.

>>>Language and Grammar- This was the specially requested thing to be reviewed.

Starting with the language, the author has used simple and understandable English rather than those overly flowy Shakespeare's words.I would say that is good because whats the use of writing a story when the readers don't understand.

For that 8/10.

Now for the grammar,there has been occasional grammar errors.The most common thing was the incorrect use of past tense of certain words.

It's a common thing for us Indian writers and I suggest to search up and browse some words with their tenses.After all its quarantine for the next 21 days.

The second thing is the absence of punctuations.

In the book,the author has used direct speech to show the dialogues of the characters.

There are certain things to be followed while reporting a sentence in direct speech.

* There should be a reporting clause.
For eg; She said.He asked.They exclaimed.

These are what you call reporting clauses.But over usage of reporting clause in each dialogue will also be really bad.Instead one can use what the character was doing at the point of time when they said the dialogue.And always using the reporting clause,'she asked'; 'he said' etc is also not good.

Note: It is not necessary that the reporting clause should always be before the dialogue. It can come after it also based on the situation.

*Punctate the starting of the dialogue with a double inverted comma (") and also end it with one too.Before closing the double inverted comma,place the appropriate punctuation be it full stop(.); question mark(?); comma(,); exclamatory mark(!) Etc.

For eg: She cried out loud,"Yay!We finally reached."

Other than these things there hasn't been any major things in your grammar.

So for that I would give a 5/10.

Now The Pros and Cons.

PROS
>Steady plot
>Unique Character names
>Unique chapter names for each chapter
>Use of images for certain situations which helps the readers to clearly visualise the story in their mind.
>Cliffhangers at the end of each chapter

CONS
>Occasional Grammar Errors
>Common Plot
>Rarely some spelling errors.

Overall Rating - 7.5/10

I recommend this book to everyone who likes a little bit of college romance and comedy mixed up together.There is ofcourse villains and lot of drama that gets you hooked up to this book.

From the prospective of a reader,I surely enjoyed the story and is looking foreward for the next update.

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I hope I have  covered everything you asked for.Correct the mistakes and you will be one of the best. lost_soul7201

All the best for the future❤.

Reviewed and Published by reader_snail