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•••The title of the book- I would say the title 'Deceivingly Yours' is a very simple and apt title for the book and it gives the readers a base and idea of what the story is going to be.So well done with that.
I'll give you a 10/10 for that.
•••Book Cover- The book cover is simple and with some artworks along with the Title and theme line written on it. But it's not giving the perfect idea as it is not getting fit with the title. You can choose any other cover which goes perfect with the book and gives the clear idea.
So for that 5/10.
•••Story Description: Now Story description is what something that attracts readers to read the story along with the cover and title of the book and these are basic things that are noticed and generates interest.
In this book, you write about trip and the incidents from where things started. The discription is quite good.
For that 6/10.
•••Prologue-
A prologue is like a short story—a small glimpse, set in your story’s world, written in the same style as the rest of your book but with clear separation from the start of your story.
Maybe it’s an entire literary device, like a flashforward of your protagonist that gives the reader a taste of the world, some crucial information for the plot, and will make sense later.
This thing I didn't find in your prologue. So I'll suggest you to instead of writing a prologue like a chapter, keep it short and use some incidents or cliff hangers in prologue which attracts new readers more.
So, 5/10 for this.
•••Plot-
With the current part of the story, I can tell that the story revolves around a group of friends and their journey of the reunion.
There along with series of incidents and happenings, things starts changing in their life.
so, I'm giving 8/10 just on the basis of currently published part.
There is still time becuase the book is not completed yet and so I can't judge you too quickly in that one.
•••Character development-
As there are various characters which holds importance, I would suggest you to give a brief description about all the characters of this book.
As I myself got confused about who is actually the main leads. And as your story description says that there are enemies, so it's obvious that there will more new members. So it helps the readers.
So for this 7/10.
•••Story telling-
This part is what I liked the most. Evey incident you mentioned are good. I would like to say, that do add some more interesting incidents.
I know the book is not totally completed, so its early to say. But my purpose of saying this is precisely to make your work interesting. Do think about this. So we can enjoy more your work.
I give you 8.5/10 for that.
•••Language and Grammar- This was the specially requested thing to be reviewed.
Starting with the language, the author has used simple and understandable English rather than those overly flowy words.I would say that is good because whats the use of writing a story when the readers don't understand.
For that 8/10.
Now for the grammar, well till the part i read, i didn't find any specific mistakes.
So for that I would give a9/10.
•••The Pros and Cons.
PROS ° Different plot ° It contains drama. ° Can say a little adventurous.
CONS ° No particular prologue. °Needed a Characters description.
Overall Rating - 7/10
I recommend this book to everyone who likes drama and emotional ones. You will surely enjoy this and find it little adventurous.
****************************** I hope I have covered everything you asked for. Correct the mistakes, do think about suggestions and you will be one of the best.
