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📜 Old Critiques | 11/13/2020

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                                [NEARLY FULLY OPEN] for TJMaguire:• A good job of taking the time to build the rules of your world for your readers!• Grammar slips here and there detracts from overall reading
                            
                              
                              
                                
                                  
                                  
                                
                              
                             
                            

                            

                              
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[NEARLY FULLY OPEN] for TJMaguire:
• A good job of taking the time to build the rules of your world for your readers!
• Grammar slips here and there detracts from overall reading.
• Slight world-building holes.

                          


                          
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Very readable! Many Wattpad stories suffer from what I like to call the Diary Syndrome, where the author has - quite unintentionally - placed themselves front and center in everything their work has to say, where their characters devolve into mere checklists and do-to lists instead of living, breathing souls. Your work does not suffer from that at all!

                          
The personality of your Zamorra is easily and clearly grasped. We know who she is, how she's been brought up, and her thoughts and feelings regarding her situation in life. 

                          
You also took the time, and therefore care, in making sure your readers have the tools needed to understand how your lore works: Werewolves being another entity, how women are treated, etc. Glossing over world-building is another common weakness I see in many Wattpad stories, and it's yet another one your work does not suffer from! Well done.

                          
Speaking of world-building however, I encourage you to look at two things:

                          
1) Real world slang!
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