Judging by @ms_pearbhian

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🌟JUDGE Ms_pearbhian

🌷LOVE DARE by bb_bhavya

Cover-4/5
It is portraying the theme of the story well but still it is missing that charm to attract the readers.

Title-5/5
I found the title eye-catchy as well as it is perfectly describing the situation of the plot.

Description- 3/5
Very short description you have given.It needs to have a little more details regarding the storyline in a better way or I can say in an interesting manner. As this place is for attracting the readers.

Storyline- 9/10
I found the storyline unique as the way you portrayed mahir and bela character was very nice.They were in love with each other from the time of collage and used to stalk each other but never able to say and when suddenly they meet in a holi party there feelings overpower and drink given by shruti was cheery on the cake and thus due to more stupidness of shruti, they get tie in the knot of love.Inshort a simple loving story without much twist and turns plus it was quite humorous too and I didn't found any loophole in between the story.

Grammar- 6.5/10
If we talk about grammatical mistakes so they were not much but when we see spelling and punctuation mistakes then they were huge in number plus you have written short abbreviations of words like "bht",''ksa'',"bda'' instead of ''bahut'', ''kesa'', ''bada'' and so many.You have sometimes uses wrong punctuations and sometimes more than needed. Like (...),(!!)

Overall Impresion- 11/15
It was a nice story with a good plot but I would suggest you to edit it out once again to avoid spelling and ellipsis mistakes which are making the look of the story down.

TOTAL-38.5/50
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🌷DIL BECHARA by AditiTheGreat

Title-4/5
Your title appears slightly catchy but it is not really new and secondly I would advise you to remove the emojis from the title space.

Cover-3.5/5
It is looking like you have done a good hard work for making this cover but still many behir pictures in collage at the background is making the look of cover down plus the title's font is also not looking nice and in that too you have added the exclamation mark which is not at all required.

Description-2/5
This place is supposed to attract the readers.You have just written that it's a story based on Behir which your cover had already shown.I know it's a OS there but still you could have shown little about it.

Storyline-7/10
I basically liked the plot of the story.It was quite mysterious and full of twist and turns and emotional too but then if we think practically then mahir could have told bela about the whole truth about vikrant being alive instead of doing sucide. You could have shown all this in a different manner instead of showing that mahir had done sucide. Like, simply the accident happened and in between of these bela got that diary and all.So,I don't like this thing in the story otherwise whole plot was very nice.

Grammar-7.5/10
You have a good grip on grammar.There were not much grammatical and spelling mistakes but I found major mistakes regarding punctuations.At some place you have missed using punctuation marks and at some place you have used them more than needed.

Overall Impresion- 10/15
Amazing story it was. Plot was nice, it's just that few loopholes were there. Otherwise your grammar was good, and about cover also it was amazing. I would suggest you for the blurb to increase.So, that it will look more nice.

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