What The Chapters Would Look like for a Rewrite

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Running.

The soft pattering of a young boy with blond hair, cerulean blue eyes, whiskered cheeks, and a panicked expression filled the normally-quiet air of the village known as Konohagakure No Sato, the village hidden in the leaves. This boy from who the pattering was coming from was named Naruto Uzumaki, a young boy, a dead last, and a monster to everyone around him. Villagers were chasing him, which was the cause of the pattering. 

"COME HERE YOU LITTLE SHIT!" A villager yelled. He was immensely fat, holding three bottles in each hand. A thundering seemed to follow wherever he ran as if bulls were chasing Naruto. In a sense, the group of villagers chasing Naruto were all piles of BULLshit. 

"WHAT DID I DO WRONG?!!" Naruto yelled behind him, his voice fearful and high-pitched. He weaved around the village when suddenly, he made a wrong turn, leading him to a small circle of houses with one opening; the one the villagers were standing in. Suddenly, people emerged from the houses around, bottles of alcohol in hand. 

"WE GOT YOU NOW, YOU DAMN DEMON BRAT!" Another villager yelled. She was a Hyuuga. Her byakugan was activated, fury evident on her face. 

"YOU KILLED MY BEST FRIEND AND HER HUSBAND!!" She yelled. Naruto had tears streaming down his eyes.

"I never did!" He yelled, only to be held down. He started thrashing violently, biting and punching, hoping to hit someone. Suddenly, he was knocked out.

Power rushed from Naruto, though it clearly wasn't his own. Suddenly, his eyes opened. He now controlled his own body again. Black aura erupted to surround him, releasing a potent and evil aura that could bring fear to the very core of even the proudest and ignorant shinobi. The energy faded. He tried to hit someone. He hit something, just not what he wanted. He punched a chunin, making him drop the kunai. Naruto rushed to grab it. He picked it up and poised himself at the villagers with his academy stance. 

'Naruto... readjust your wrist. Move it to be more diagonal from your body,' a strange, deep voice spoke in Naruto's head. Naruto listened, hoping it could save him. Suddenly, information surged into his body and head like a tsunami, giving him the information he didn't know he had. 'Young Naruto, please allow me to guide you in both muscle and mind,' the same strange voice spoke. Naruto gave a deft nod.

"COCKY BRAT! LET'S FINISH WHAT OUR GREAT HOKAGE STARTED!" A chunin yelled. Instantly, Naruto launched forward with a speed he didn't know he had. He punched the man in the stomach with an odd, nearly inhuman, amount of strength. The man doubled over and Naruto jumped into the air, sending a spin-kick to his jaw. He then dove under the man's falling body before rolling into a handspring, propelling himself upward. He performed a 360 kick, extending his leg at the last second so the momentum could hurt a genin in the crowd. The crowd then gave a wide berth as the Hyuuga woman stepped forward. 

"You killed her... my precious sister-in-arms... my rival-in-love, and my shoulder to cry on! You're dead!" The woman yelled. She dashed at Naruto with Jonin-level speeds. Naruto, having stood still, suddenly opened his eyes, revealing pitch black rings surrounding his eyes. He launched forward, slapping her on the forehead before dropping to the floor, sweeping her off of her feet. As she fell, Naruto sent a kick to her ribs, making a crack sound out. The woman lurched over, coughing up blood. Naruto's black eye rings suddenly went to his knuckles. He picked the woman up easily and punched her gut, making her puke blood on him. He used all the force his small body could muster, destroying a building with her body.

"W-Wha..." a man muttered, looking at the fallen Hyuuga in shock.

"It doesn't matter! It's one of him and over 50 of us!" A man yelled out. Naruto spat on the ground in front of him, as the voice within him told him to do. Everyone in the crowd yelled out, charging at him. Naruto planted his feet firmly into the ground. 

'Remember, Naruto. Spin kick is good but use normal kicks too. They will vary your attack and punches also help,' the strange voice spoke. 

Naruto nodded and... performed a spin kick at one of the men, sending him spiraling into more people. He then landed and used his chakra to send a flurry of punches at a man, caving his chest. He swiftly proceeded to use the strange black markings on his eyes to project a seal that felt as if it belonged to him. He pooled chakra into his body and teleported to it, surprising everyone. Suddenly, an orange cloak flickered around his body as his eyes morphed into purple eyes with black rings. He then swept his leg out, crushing another villager's leg. Suddenly, three genin jumped him with one jonin. 

The three genin smirked as the Jonin pointed at him. "Let's get him as the first mission of team 18!" The three yelled. Naruto noticed they were on his teleportation mark. He teleported to it and the black markings of his sage eyes went onto the Jonin. He teleported onto the Jonin's back and knocked him out before returning to his mark, slicing the three genin on their backs. He then sliced the jonin's eye. Suddenly, three anbu appeared around him.

"How is he doing this?" A man with a crow mask asked.

"I don't care! Let's kill him now!" A man with an elephant mask responded.

"Fine," a man with a falcon mask responded. They all drew tantos, or the blades anbu used. Naruto held out his hand and a black rod formed in his hand; a rod specialized in blocking chakra. Naruto raised his palm, the black rods forming as bullets. 

"Goodbye," Naruto spoke, his child-like voice being replaced with a more sagely one. The bullets fired, piercing two of the anbus' skin like staples and paper. 

"D-Demon!" The elephant anbu yelled as he charged. Naruto dashed forward. The elephant Anbu's hands were cloaked in earth gauntlets. He slammed them at Naruto, who blocked with his chakra rod. He then slammed an edge into the man's gut with chakra-enhanced strength, sending him flying. Naruto dashed at him, kicking him in the chin. Naruto then sliced off his head. Slowly, he fell over, his body overexerted. His eyes reverted back to normal and his hair, which had grown due to an orange chakra that appeared a little bit later in the fight, shrunk to normal length. He slowly lost consciousness, but not fast enough to see another anbu. This one had silver hair and a dog mask. Behind him was one with black hair and a weasel mask, as well as one with purple hair and a cat mask.

Naruto slowly regained consciousness, whipping his head around violently. He noticed he was in a sewer, the sound of water dripping filling his ears. "Where am I?" He muttered to himself, looking up. He noticed a large cage made of iron with a seal on the door of the cage. Behind it were two glaring red eyes with large slits. The sound of swishing could be heard. 

'Hello,' a voice spoke. Naruto turned to the eyes, which narrowed at him.

'Behind you,' a voice came from the eyes, this one more feminine than the first. Naruto blinked and noticed behind the cage were two human-sized red eyes and the sound of swishing was quieter. 

"Who are you?" Naruto asked.

'Turn around and look at me,' the original, more male voice spoke. Naruto turned to see an old man sitting in the air, his legs crossed as if he were meditating. 'Hello, Young Naruto. My name is Hagoromo Otsutsuki, the sage of six paths.' 

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