We are not what other people say we are. We are who we know ourselves to be, and we are what we love. That's okay.
_Laverne Cox
Every person has a right to be who they are, and what they want to be, and no one else can judge them for that, and...
There were some punctuation errors, the grammar was okay. The father in the beginning acted more like a child/teenager than an old man. I liked the worldbuilding but it's best to slowly show how the world works and not info-dump. For example, there shouldn't be that long text about 3-gt in the first chapter.
The chapter has a nice flow and a good balance between show and tell but there could be more descriptions. You could show their feelings better. The end is abrupt and there could be a better cliffhanger. Some people tend to read the first chapter to decide whether they'll read the book or not. So it's important to have a great ending in the first chapter.
Margo Fawn and the Contagious Missing Delirium 1 by Sasha_Samuel8,5/10
