Brooke's Book Review - Temp. Closed :(

Forget Me Not Review

Author: LadyBethany

Title and Cover: I like the title. It's quick and intriguing. I always do my reviews on the title and cover before reading so, not quite sure how it fits into the book, but I am sure it does. The cover could use some work tbh. Maybe just have one character be the cover instead of copy and paste inserts on a black page. As this is a fan fiction and not a book/novel type this is okay.

I feel like the little blue flower picture you had for characters should be the cover because I liked the font and it's super cute. Please tell me how you made it because I will def use for my books (What I mean is did you use Canva or Website)

4/10

Grammar and Spacing: This was the one you struggled most with, which even though it sounds bad, is very good. You have a very good idea on how to develop a books plot a characters which is the hard thing to learn.

I put a lot of my notes in your comments so you can get more interaction with your book, but also so you know what I am specifically talking about. I would look there for more sentence structure ideas. Main points is too make your sentences with more flow. You don't have a problem with run on sentences, but you do have an issue with making them too short or choppy. "I went home. I did homework" does not sound as good as "I went home and then did some homework." Just the use of more FANBOY conjunctions (for, and, nor, but, or, yet) in your sentences and your set!

I mean really that's the only issue I saw. You have good length paragraphs with good grammar and spelling. Good job :)

17/25

Plot and Characteristics: Thank you for the character intro as I used it a lot for referencing. Still even now in this review, I am going to get some names wrong because it is a bit confusing, sorry for that.

As this is a fanfic I would assume that the characters are already pretty well developed. But still, you do an amazing job portraying the characters. Even the little baby has it''s own traits like preferencing his mom and the wet nurse.

I will say plot wise (as someone not familiar with the fandom) I am very confused. I getting whats happening in general, but like I said the names all mix up :(

I love Deamon, he and his wife are so cute!

I am giving you 10 less points because of the confusion, though you can't change the fact that I have bad memory. I am sure the enjoyment level for someone of this fandom is high :)

25/35

Worldbuilding: Like I said earlier, as this is a fanfic I am guessing this world is already well developed.

I love your writing style. You don't progress through the story too fast, though I would say to not change POV so frequently just because I kinda get who is who in the names mixed up again :(

I don't have much critique as I thought it was a good story :)

I only read 3 chapters, but don't be offended. I am changing my policy to only 3 chapters per book because of how many people there are. I also think you can get a feel for a book in three chapters or less anyways :)

30/30

OVERALL: 76/100

I feel like I grade pretty harshly so to me this is really good. I also grade on enjoyment and most of points lost was simply through confusion. Just work on your sentence structure and you gold!