Eternal Critiques

TBG || Bound By Glass || @Nerdyna

Genre: Science Fiction
Chapters: Chapter 1

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1. Interest

You do a good job of piquing interest early on with mentions to natural disasters and such, implying an apocalyptic world. I feel like there was a lot of infodumping in the beginning, which interfered with the intensity you were trying to work up in her chasing the paper, and I think you can find a more subtle way to incorporate that information in, or at least a way more related to the immediate happenings. I like how you introduced the forest/trees, then in turn the natural disasters.

2. Grammar

Your grammar is decent, especially since English isn't your first language. There are a few places where it flows awkwardly, but there was very little outright wrong about any of it, which I commend you for.

3. Overall

Mostly, just as listed above, work on flow, basic proofreading, and infodumping. The chapter did run a little long, as if the content were unnecessarily stretched, but that's not too big of an issue. Overall great job.