ART @-accioclary

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REVIEW FOR "ART" BY -accioclary

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I noticed a few spelling and grammar mistakes but they're easy to fix with a quick read through and edit.
Koda seems so cute and sweet, his nervousness is quite relatable, especially his panic of not finding a seat on the train, I bus to and from school and the worry of sitting on the floor is very real.
Vera's really cool, I like her element of sass and badassery despite the fact that we haven't seen much of her yet, definitely looking forward to seeing more of her as the story continues.

I'm not normally a fan of the "American student at Hogwarts" trope, but I really like how you've portrayed it, only giving him one American parent because it's very interesting to read.
You've portrayed Luna almost exactly as she was in the books and I really appreciate that because she isn't overly dreamy but she's still rather odd and in her own world.
There are times when he book is slightly over descriptive but I think they're balanced out really well over the story and aren't a problem.
Overall so far, The book is light hearted and sweet and Koda's relationship with Luna is definitely something I'm looking for to reading more of.
It's a very solid first three chapters, you've introduced your characters really well and their already starting to form relationships with eachother, which don't seem to be moving too fast, a very good thing.