Winternight Reviews (CLOSED)

The Brutal Beast

Book name: The Brutal Beast

Author: @laughingpearls

Review done by: Ginvera24

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S U M M A R Y

When your cover was presented to me, honestly, I didn't liked it. AT ALL. I mean, yea, it has the author's name on it, and the title, but no, it doesn't pull people to read your book. And the summary......I understand that English isn't your first language, but you're using your punctuation incorrectly.

"People say relationship is based on the foundation of trust but how far is it true!" ??? You're missing A COMMA and the exclamation mark is supposed to be a question mark. That's just one of the problems there.

I've said this in the chapter before, but I'm going to say it again.

READERS JUDGE BOOKS BY THEIR COVERS AND THEIR SUMMARIES.

And right now, neither of them is attractive enough. Let's say, that you're an amazing author. Let's say, that you're good. But no one IS actually going to know because they do not feel inclined to read your book!!!

I know, this world is unfair.

T H E  R E S T  O F  Y O U R  B O O K

"A girl in her early twenties probably arround......" Spelling mistake. OOO THERE'S ANOTHER ONE. Not a good first impression, Friend. You should really get an editor.

Oh, the plot of this book reminds me of this drama my mom was watching the other day......what was it called — AH YES, Masters' Sun. Right now, you're actually lucky it isn't Ruby reviewing your book, if not you'll probably witness lines and lines of words circling around how cliché your book is; typical characters drawn to each other for no reason, so and so......

THERE ARE SOO MANY GRAMMAR MISTAKES UGHHH

"'Ya ok. Anyways youll get this job because everyone who is present here is unable to compete with your qualification......'"

*spits out coffee and stares at the screen, wide-eyed with disbelief*

WHA — Friend they are OVERQUALIFIED for the qualification whatcha talking about?!??! They are most definitely able to compete with her!! And don't get me wrong but, what's with her and this 'ji' thing? Is it related to her religion or something??

*not even halfway through the book, and I'm already raging*

Blablablablabla. Tell me more about your characters. What do they look like besides 'drool worthy', 'pretty' and  'mid-twenties'?? I mean, look, I get that they're some good looking people, BUT HOW DO THEY LOOK LIKE?!?!? And yes, I get that the file is in ashes now, but how did the know that it was burnt? Yes, that was confusing. Take your time.

Next chapter now. "......straighten her sobs"?? Ackscuse me?? HAHAHAHAHAHA straighten her sobs. She's not straightening wrinkled clothing. Very effective.

*spits out food*

Wha — WAIT WAIT WAIT — Even if she works everywhere except outside his cabin, isn't it still a 60 percent chance that both of them will meet each day? I mean, isn't the chances of colliding higher when he hires her then not hiring her? What's with him......

Wait, her room has a hall and it's small? You gotta change that, Friend. Three pairs of clothing and no money......how is she still alive?!?!

Wow, a really awkward scene at the end. Why am I laughing?? 

O V E R A L L

Really cliche. Incorrect tense, grammar and vocabulary are plentiful. Contrary to what I thought before reading this book, this work needs dire editing before proceeding on, especially on the sentence structure and the description. The only thing I enjoyed was your character building, but I guess that's it. Again, there's just something that keeps me reading.

G R A D E

Writing: 1/5

What I liked: 2/5

What I did not like: -1 (this is VERY lenient)

Total: 2/10

Not the worst I've read. Yet.