19. Mafia's Obsession

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Author— ShailajaBan

Hey, let's appreciate the good descriptions first. They were very good and vivid. I liked how you described everything.

One thing, I don't know how to give constructive criticism on this because it's merely started. The story is just 4-5 chapters long till know.

Almost everything was okay, please take care that it's 'wasn't' not 'was'nt'. The keyword being okay.

It wasn't anything awesome. It lacked the thrill. The thrill you get whilst reading some dark romance story or mafia story. It was plain boring.

I think you should work on the plot a bit. Make it more intriguing.

The rest was fine.

That's it ;) dear author respond to the review.

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