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30. Mera sab kuch hai iss chehre pe

NiharKhan

Cuteness. Utter cuteness. It was so cuteeee! Huh. Dev. Oh my, where can I buy my own Dev? Excuse me, miss what's the recipe of cooking a Dev like yours? Now coming down to actual shit.

First off. You know don't start a story with character sketch. That's a turn off. Start it with a prologue. A reader is meant to know the character through the story. You see, it's how we connect to the character. Not by some character sketch. You just don't tell your reader that Dev Dixit is young, talented and blah. If you want you could have started the first paragraph like this—

Dev. A young and talented business tycoon, loved his coffee [insert whatever it is] He loved his family beyond anything. They were the world to him.

And yes, go on like that. Sorry not good at explaining stuff.

Next. You wrote in inverted commas. But not grammatically correct. I'll explain how you write in inverted commas.

How you have written— Sonakshi: “It's a beautiful day. ”

How you should write it — Sonakshi said, “It's a beautiful day.”

See, even the littlest of the little things make a difference.

Next. Don't change perspectives. Let third person in third person only. Don't switch.

(Well, it's pretty much it. Next, when you edit it– if you ever do it– then delete all the author's note and stuff. And correct the grammar errors. If you need help, you know you can reach out to me.)