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38. Mohabbat

NiharKhan

[Due to a glitch, only a part of review was published. So I'm publishing it again.]

Ah, the story was good. It was cute and sweet. A junior and senior. I have seen so many love stories happening in that. Reminded me many things. Ah, the concept isn't anything brilliant but that doesn't matter as long as you have good execution. I'm personally quite a sucker for clichès, especially bad boy stories, besties in love and next door neighbors.

Title, it was nice but not catchy enough.

Description, this was far better than your previous ones. But I'll just give you a bit of advice. Your description gave too much away about the plot. I almost knew the whole plot through the description only. So it killed the excitement a bit. You don't have to reveal everything. That's crucial. If you tell almost the whole plot in description, the reader won't be intrigued enough to read.

Tips for  better writing—

So, Nihar, you have the base cleared. You know all the basics. Refrain from writing the dialogues in italic. Italic is mainly used for highlighting things but how are you supposed to highlight when the whole thing is in italic, nai? Point, right? Since you have used italic in dialogues you had to switch to writing in Caps for giving emphasis. But, sweetie, caps means yelling in the writing/virtual world. So that's wrong on your part.

And yeah, try to write the third person perspective in past tense. It isn't the most appealing when third person is written in present.

When editing, keep in mind to give space after each punctuation mark. Also, follow the tips above.

Remember, editing is the key to success.

Much love,
Akriti.