While reading others work I often find it plain or without detail. Details and descriptions are very important. Add detail to even the simple situations.
Like:
Door: what kind of door? An oak/wood, metal, enchanting, dull?
What about its color or texture? Brown, dusty, grainy, smooth?
Example:
(No): we make our way through the door ahead of us turning its handle before we enter.
(Yes): we make our way through the grand, cherry wood doors ahead of us, turning its crystal handle before we enter.
Another example:
(Yes): The area was desolate; there was little to no life left. I felt chills running down my spine as I spotted the ruins splattered with blood. The gravel underneath my shoes crackled as I stepped closer to the pillar.
The pillar was made of marble; had this place not be in ruins then it would've been shining and beautiful. You could see the carefully sculpted, intricate designs.
One half of the pillar had fallen and crumbled to dust. I saw the chipped pieces of marble all over the floor.
(No): I walked up to the pillar and it was broken and stuff there were weird things and stuff all over it.
Notice how it only fits in two sentences? Now, tell me, what did it look like in your mind?
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