Hellu ^^
I just wanted to thank everyone who read my Story.
Please leave a feedback with constructive criticism (If I see any comments like >Uh stop writing, you're stupid<, I'm going to personally notify the one who wrote it.)
I need to know what I can do better and what you like the most about my writing-style, not how stupid or bad at writing I am, therefore I have my friends and family to judge me.
Otherwise I wanted to pinpoint on one big issue with my writing I'm fully aware of:
I tent to rush the stories... I can't change the fact I'm rather impatient, but I'll try to stretch the story with time-skips and flashbacks.
I wrote like the first 5 chapters of this story on my phone in these Samsung Memo thingys, but written out on my Computer it's less, so I have to stretch a bit, so the whole story wont play in less than I week ^^
And If you haven't noticed yet:
- BEN isn't one of Slenders Pastas in my story and he wont interact with them, its a story just about Ben.
- I did the math on BEN's age wrong on purpose. He died in 2002, that's cannon, Jerusables incident was in 2010, Ben's spirit was theoretically 20 at this point. (12 when he died + 8 = 20)
But saying he's dead for 6 years making him younger than he is. 2002+6=2008 -> He's lying, and it will be story relevant for why he lied. (Tragic Backstory incomming °^°)
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FanficYou were a normal college student with a passion for video games. One day at the beginning of summer holidays you decided to buy a game for your old Nintendo 64... but you never thought a game can escalate on this scale... BEN drowned x reader (po...