Okay guys, this is the first part of my book. I'm no proffesional writer, but I may be getting there. Tell me what you think, tell me how to improve, anything!
Taking the chances
I ran as fast as my legs could carry me, skidding round corners. I didn't know if I could be fast enough to save her. One of my best friends, the next victim. Tears streamed down my face, my throat and lungs burned my limbs weak. I got there finally, to find Isis standing on a window ledge, her eyes wide as the hooded murderer pushed her off. I ran, screaming as I did. I heard her screams that quickly turned into a harsh gasp, then gurgles. The murderer turned to me, smiling. I couldn't see his eyes; his dark brown hair covered them. There was a flash; smoke appeared around him, like you saw on magic tricks. I ran at him, my hands clenched into fists. He was gone. I hit the wall, and then slid over to the window. Isis' body was hanging limply. I looked away quickly, fresh streams of tears running down my face. I couldn't take it. Too many people had been murdered; I had always been seconds too late. Part 1. Keegan's view. Chapter 1 The forest was silent as I passed through it. No sign of any life. I blended into the darkness as if I was part of it, my movements flowing, making me seem like an animal. I came to a short stop in a small clearing, the moonlight shining onto me. I looked round, spotting a figure hiding in the shadows. Sam. She leaped out of the shadows, ran up to me, and hugged me. Her daughter, Maya gracefully ran out of the trees, following her mother. She leaped onto Sam's back, and we set off running. We leaped over fallen trees, ran through long patches of grass and through rivers, before coming to a stop next to a river. Maya hopped off Sam's back, and went to play next to the river. We sat on the dusty floor, and started to talk. "So, how are you and Jordan?" Sam asked, her eyes never letting go of Maya. She was so protective, a better mother than me. I had a child namedJacob, only 3 months. Jordan had him right now. I smiled at Sam. "We are engaged" I whispered, showing her the ring on my left hand. She screamed, and Maya jumped, and then went back to playing. Sam hugged me tightly and I laughed. "You never told me!" She yelled at me. I rolled my eyes. "It was two days ago, I didn't see you yesterday!" I replied rolling my eyes sarcastically. She smiled and we both laughed, as Maya dropped the fish she was holding as it moved in her hand. We stood up again, Maya running over to Sam and leaping back onto her back again, before we shot off into the forest.
Another dark figure started running with us, before finally breaking through the trees. Brook. Isis' seven year old daughter. She was coping pretty well, stepping straight into her mother's place. She was very mature for her age; she didn't act seven, more like seventeen. She ran against Sam, jumping up and gave Maya a high five, then carried on running. They both laughed. We laughed along with them, the laughter echoing through the empty forest.
We finally reached Sam's apartment, panting with exhaustion. Maya and brook happily ran off to Maya's room, chattering like the little girl's they were. Sam and I both slumped onto the sofa. We started chatting about our week and what had happened. "How are you and Aaron doing then? I haven't seen him in a while." I asked, starting off the convocation. She looked down at the ground. "He...He left..." She stuttered, obviously trying to hold back the tears. I put my arm round her as tears unwillingly seeped down her red cheeks. After she stopped crying I started to ask her questions. "What do you mean he's gone?" I asked her in a quiet but determined voice. She sniffed and wiped her eyes again. "Well... I came home two days ago, and he was sat there, his head looking down at his feet, I asked him what was wrong and he looked up. His eyes looked weird, almost as if he was in pain." She began, before almost bursting into tears. I got my notebook out and began writing down everything she said. She started to speak again, in a small, unsteady voice. "He told me he had to go, so I told him the bathroom was upstairs on the right, I thought he was joking, but he said he needed to go, get away from us all. I told him he didn't need to and asked why. He just walked out. He dropped the ring on the floor. I just sat there; Maya was asleep so she doesn't know. I told her that her dad had gone on holiday. But the worst part is..." she took a deep breath. Something bad had happened. It was obvious. "Yesterday he was found." She whispered her eyes watery. That wasn't so bad. "And? He was found. At least he's not been murdered." I said smiling. "But he was!" She suddenly burst back into tears. I froze. Another murder. Two in one week. What more could go wrong? That was the wrong question to ask. The real question was... How many more? I got up and ran out the door. I had to find out what was going on.
