Author: Directionerdaddy
Reviewer: WinnifredMarie
Genre: Fan fiction/Romance ( I think:)
Cover: I don't think the cover matches the story that well. I'm not trying to be mean. It's a beautiful cover, but I don't think it suits the story that much. If you would like, I would make you a cover for you to have look at. You can use it too. Only if you wanted me too. (3/5)
Title: I think it's a great title, i think it matches the story quite well, but I think something like "Treat You Better" would be suitable too. Because her bf beats her by accident. Or one of the One Direction song names that matches would be good too. (4/5)
Description: I think the description is great. I just think you could mention a bit more of the drama that happens but I'm someone who LOVES spoilers so never mind that:) It leaves you wanting to read more. Oh and PLEASE publish more chapters the suspense if killing me!!!! (5/5)
Plot: I think it has a brilliant plot. I love this story, it's in my library, it's on my MUST READ reading list, and I'm not a huge 1D fan. I like the way Harry is a cheeky little boy and Luke is all kind and caring. I live Luke, sorry. (5/5)
Grammar/Spelling: I think it would be SUPER cool if you made it all like diary entries. So let's say the first chapter was a cut out from Olivia's diary, and about how excited she was to be spending a while away with her boyfriend. Then you could have Harry for when Olivia comes into the shop like "I saw a pretty cute girl walk in. I hoped she was buying something. I smirked. She was. I left my wallet in her bag so that she would come back" etc.... But there were no spelling mistakes maybe a few but I'm blind so🤣🤣 Me personally I'm not a huge fan of the grammar you used. I preferred the first person mode. (4/5)
Overall: It's a brilliant story, PLEASE write more, I love it. (5/5)
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