The Evil Rant And Review Book

Sleepsong

As a note, this will be my final review. I couldn't keep up with them if you paid me and I've decided to finally stop trying. My decision has a number of reasons, but the main ones are that I can't seem to make these things funny anymore and there seem to be a ton of "honest" review books out there now. Most of them are teenage snark in my opinion but whatever.

If you want a brutal honest review that counts for something after I'm gone, try PedanticAndGrumpy I can vouch that his opinion should matter.

Right, moving on. I'm going to be saying goodbye to you all with a final review for a story by one of the people I consider a friend on this site. Which translates into me being extra tough. For the people who were in line and paid for their reviews, I'm willing to discuss your stories via PM if you're still interested.

Moving on. Doing this review because the author asked me. Let's get rolling. I'm not going to do my usual format so bear (🐻) with me.

Title: Sleepsong

Genre: gay vampire horror werewolf bad boy *insert any other popular wattpad genre here*

Author: Aaron_Ledgers

Number of chapters read: prologue +3 plus skimmed some of the last chapters with a special focus on chapter 101 - which is already way too much

First opinion: I was a little intrigued. Then I wasn't.

Cover: Made by you. Works.

Blurb: I'm going to come right out and say it. Your blurb bores me.

First it's the abusive bullshit I just know will end up being romanticizes and not in an accurate BDSM way but in a Fifty Shades of Grey way.

Then you spend three out of four paragraphs telling me Aerin has a boring life. I'm already bored.

I'm not liking Aerin from it because I get the feeling that he's a whiny teenager. I also don't see what my interest in your plot should be. Yes, potential relationship with werewolf. And? What's this the story of? Is it a romance that has the finality of them getting together? A horror that ends in murder? An epic sci fi adventure? None of the above. Seeing as your supposed hunting and killing is probably solved halfway through the book, I'm guessing none of the above so I'm not biting.

Writing style: your writing is mostly clean and your use if grammar good, but you already know that. You do have small, editing mistakes especially with punctuation and starting dialogue without a capital letter.

By the way, this ?!?! is not a valid punctuation mark in American English as far as I know. Perfectly permitted in British English, but I've had editors tell me to burn this ?!

Using more than that is completely unprofessional.

Your style is bombastic and over descriptive. This has not improved since BILY. The only difference is that you had more reasons for description there. Here, you just ramble on about mundane things, but I'll get to that in a minute.

Tone down the description and do a search in your chapters for how many times you use certain words. Example? I think it was chapter 2 when Aerin went to take a bath in the river. Just search how many times he flips his long hair and unsticks it from his sweaty back. If it's more than once, it's already one too many times.