Critique Station 2020

B 2-2 [🌺]

[Paalala lang po. Hindi po ako perpekto. Binabase ko po ang pagcritic ng mga stories niyo sa nalalaman ko at gusto ko lang maging honest sa inyo. Now, if hindi po kayo kontento, wala na po akong magagawa doon.]

TITLE: Secret Agent Series 2: His Uncontrollable Craving
Written by: blitzkrieg_08

➡️️Title pa lang, alam ng pang-action but then, yung main title talaga ang nakakuha ng atensyon ko. 'His Uncontrollable Craving' yun pa lang, parang ang complicated na ng sitwasyon. Not in a bad way, but in a good way wherein it gains attention. At first, akala ko, the protagonist craves for blood and actions but I am wrong about that. Hahaha. It is really interesting!

COVER:

➡️The cover is good and talagang bagay siya sa genre ng story. Napansin ko lang na parang medyo nasobrahan sa laki yung font to the point na parang na-occupy na yung sides ng cover.

NARRATION:

➡️The narration is good and it is not boring to read. Also, it is well-written. And you did a great job in researching the things about the condition of the main character. I don't even know that, that kind of condition really exist and it really helps to understand other people who has that kind of condition in real life.

TECHNICALITIES:

➡️I'll go with your spacings since parang yun ang una kong napansin. I suggest that you put some line spacing before and after the dialogues para mahaba tignan at hindi masyadong magulo. I also notice some language you use which is nihongo. Hehehe. Anime lover din kasi ako. Kaya, some words are familiar to me.

OVERVIEW:

➡️It's great actually. Hindi siya boring at nakakaenjoy siya basahin. Nakakaaliw ang character ni Aki kahit na lalaki siya. Still, his personality suits him. Crush ko sana siya. Kaso, alam mo na. Hahaha.

Quote from Shee: “No man is perfect. But if there's love, he will be.”