[Paalala lang po. Hindi po ako perpekto. Binabase ko po ang pagcritic ng mga stories niyo sa nalalaman ko at gusto ko lang maging honest sa inyo. Now, if hindi po kayo kontento, wala na po akong magagawa doon.]
TITLE: You & I: Taken by the CEO
Written by: BossHikarie
➡️At first, akala ko Series siya. But I think, parang hindi naman. The title is okay pero there's a side kung saan mapapatanong talaga ako kung para saan yung 'You & I'. Kasi for me, Taken by the CEO is enough to be the title of it.
COVER:
➡️Your cover is okay. I'll just go with the fonts that you used. Para kasing hindi siya maganda tignan at hindi fit sa picture na ginamit mo. Parang napasobra siya sa pag-occupy sa right side. If possible, pwede mo naman siyang ilagay sa center para maayos tignan.
NARRATION:
➡️ Your narration is good. The way you use the third person pov is okay. Malinaw at hindi malalalim na salita ang ginamit mo. I like its flow dahil sa hindi siya pabitin every chapters.
TECHNICALITIES:
➡️ So far, ang napansin ko lang na technicalities ay yung paggamit mo nito (...). Kung maaari ay iwasan mo. Okay naman na kahit isang period lang ang gamitin mo.
OVERVIEW:
➡️Your story is another typical office romance pero this time, iba siya. As in, ibang-iba sa mga storyline na nabasa ko dahil sa hindi lang iisa ang karibal ng bida, kundi dalawa. Amd that makes your story unique and interesting.
Quote from Shee: “No one can take you down in a battle if you have the courage to fight for your heart's desire. Remember, love conquers all.”
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