[Paalala lang po. Hindi po ako perpekto. Binabase ko po ang pagcritic ng mga stories niyo sa nalalaman ko at gusto ko lang maging honest sa inyo. Now, if hindi po kayo kontento, wala na po akong magagawa doon.]
TITLE: Maling Numero
Written by: PAINTERPEN
➡️Your story is simple. As in simple lang talaga siya para sa akin. But then, as I read your story, it got my attention because it so good.
COVER:
➡️Again, simple lang din siya but good thing at fit siya sa description ng story mo. Especially that it is all about a guy who sent a message to her crush. Kung saan nagsimula talaga ang nakakaaliw buhay pag-ibig niya. I like the cover's vibe on it.
NARRATION:
➡️Your narration is good and the way you narrate the scene of the story is superb! Talagang mararamdaman mo kung gaano kakwela ang mga characters nito. Even the tatay! Gosh! I enjoy reading it kahit hindi pa man sila nagkikita ng kinababaliwan niyang crush! Haha.
TECHNICALITIES:
➡️ So far, medyo wala akong napansing mga errors dito. As in, super linis at maayos ang paggawa nito. Even the way kung paano magbatuhan ng mga dialogue ang mga characters at kung paano mo naeexplain ang mga senaryo at emosyon ng mga ito. Thumbs up with that, author!
OVERVIEW:
➡️This story is one of a kind. A simple story na nagrereflect talaga ng tunay na buhay dahil sa nangyayari din naman talaga ang mga ito. Yung patextmate-textmate at pagwrongsent sa maling tao. I really enjoy reading this story. Hindi boring ang bawat chapters nito.
Quote from Shee: “Even the stupidest things we did can be the most amazing things that happened in our life that for sure, will never ever forget.”
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Critique Station 2020
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